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Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone



 
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Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone #1 (permalink) Sat Jul 18, 2009 13:54 pm   Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone
 

Please correct my essay.

Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.

New technological innovations always give advance changed in a global society. Nowadays computer technology is the most advance discovery of scientists. Like airplane and telephone, computers have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. In my view computer technology is the most innovative discovery. In a global society people can interact with each other easily with the help of computers. There are many reasons of that.

;[One is that, nowadays everybody knows how to operate computer, hence with the help of computers business men can do their business globally. People can communicate with each others via computers. Consequently, people can save their money and time as well. So it is a booming area to know.

Second is that, day by day new versions of advance computers technologies are coming in the market. These helps people to their day to day life. For example, in advance countries people use computers to reduce their travel. Like they prefer to do online shopping and sometimes people do work from home. In this case computers not only reduce the fatigue of people but safe the environment also. Students are also taking benefit of computers. They find out and study their material online via computers. They keep in touch with each others.

In addition to this, computers are the cheap and full time available source of communication for those who are globalized. With the help of computers people can talk and see to each others as well. Therefore, most of the people use computers for communication. Computers are also helpful to record the data and it can be reuse any time. Hence, nowadays every office is using computers.

In a nut shell, I would like to say now computer became a part human life. It is really a wonderful innovation. The world has been completely changed by the discovery of computers.

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Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the teleph #2 (permalink) Sat Jul 18, 2009 16:19 pm   Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the teleph
 

New technological innovations always give (rise to) change(s) in a global society. Nowadays computer technology is the most advance discovery of scientists. Like air(o)plane(s) and telephone(s), computers have changed the way that nations interact with each other in (that) society.

In my view computer technology is the most innovative discovery. In a global society people can interact with each other easily with the help of computers.

There are many reasons (for) that.

One is that, nowadays (nearly)everybody knows how to operate (a)computer, hence with the help of computers business men can do their business globally.
People can communicate with each other via computers.
Consequently, people can save money and time. So it is a booming area to know.

Second is that, day by day new(er) versions of advance computers technologies are coming (onto) the market. These help people (in) their day to day li(ves).
For example, in advance(d) countries people use computers to reduce their travel. (T)hey prefer to do on-line shopping and sometimes people do (their)work from home.

In this case computers not only reduce the fatigue of people but (also save) the environment .
Students are also (reaping the) benefit(s) of computers. They find out and study their material on-line via computers. They (can also) keep in touch with each other.

In addition to this, computers are (a) cheap and full-time available source of communication for those who are globalized.

With the help of computers people can talk and see each other as well. Therefore, most people use computers for communication.
Computers are also helpful (in recording) data, and (the data) can be (available for) reuse (at) any time.
Hence, nowadays (almost) every office (uses) computers.

In a nut-shell, I would like to say (that) computer(s) (have) bec(o)me a part human life. It is a really wonderful innovation. The world has been completely changed by the discovery of computers.

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Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone #3 (permalink) Sat Jul 18, 2009 22:22 pm   Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone
 

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