Countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other

[Gurramrashmi]

Please check my essay.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other countries.
Use examples and reasons to support your position.

There are many countries in our world. Some countries are developed while others are developing. All countries are the part of world. Therefore, in my perspective countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other countries. There are many reasons for this. These are as follows.

In my view if we want to live in a pollution free environment we will have to develop a clean world. The reason is we cannot avoid the spreading of smog and fumes. Therefore, if all the countries together give their contribution towards this then we can create not only pollution free countries but a clean world. Consequently, every person will use fresh air and feel healthy. I also feel every country has a peace if all the countries engage together. Progress of one country is depends on other. So terrorist attack will not happened in any country.

Every country has brainy people. These people work only for their country. Among them some have facilities to do their work while others do not have facilities to do their work. Therefore, I feel if all countries do the same work together with the brainy people good result will come out by the use of lesser amount of money and time. So people will share their thought and idea with each others and reach to the final goal. It will not only good for one country but all the countries and automatically beneficial for the world.

In my opinion if all the countries engage together then they share their culture with each others. The reason is some countries have good cultures like India and china. I feel culture is the most important part of progress of any country. A good cultured country can only give a good world.

In a nut shell I would like to say if we want the progress of our country we will have to engage together with all countries. In this way we can make a peaceful, beautiful and pollution free environment.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of History (2)

[Kitosdad]

Just like I said Rashmi, you are capable of turning out good work!

Kitos.
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[Gurramrashmi]

Hi Kitos
As you suggested me. I did all my efforts to re-write it. Please correct it.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other countries.
Use examples and reasons to support your position.

There are many countries in this world. Some countries are developed while others are developing. All countries are the part of world. Therefore, in my perspective countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other countries. There are many reasons for this. These are as follows.

In my view if we want to live in a pollution free environment first we will have to give our efforts to make a clean world. The reason is we cannot avoid the spreading of smog and fumes. Therefore, if all the countries together give their contribution towards this then we can create not only pollution free countries but a clean world also. Consequently, every person will use fresh air and feel healthy. I also feel every country has a peace if all the countries engage together. The reason is progress of one country depends on others. So terrorist attack will not occurred in any country.

Every country has brainy people. These people work only for their country. Some people have facilities to do their work while others do not have facilities to do their work. Therefore, I feel if all countries do the same work together with the brainy people so good results will come out by the use of lesser amount of money and time. So people will share their thought and idea with each others and reach to the final goal. It will not only good for one country but all the countries also and automatically beneficial for the world.

In my opinion if all the countries engage together then they can share their culture with each others. The reason is some countries like India and china have good culture. I feel culture is the most important part for progress of any country. A good cultured country can only give a good world.

In a nut shell I would like to say if we want the progress of our country we will have to engage together with all countries. In this way we can make a peaceful, beautiful and pollution free environment.