TOEFL® essay: The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns

[Yamilet]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns

Jobs are very important in the life of a human being, it teaches them how to accomplish things and how to achieve their goals. It provides them with the opportunity of knowing how to save their money, and how to spend it. Love is a main characteristic a person should have in order to have a successful professional life. I can not agree with this statement for few reasons. Not everyone works for the money, and the vast majority of people work because they love what they do.

Money is very important for many reasons, you need it to buy the main necessities, that a person needs to survive, like food, clothes, and shelter, a place where you can keep warm in the cold winter days. Others go to work, because they earn good money, these enables them to have a wonderful life, be able to travel, to shop and do and have many things. However, money is not the most important thing people need. Love, family, and friendships are very important as well, but we can not depend on them to give us all the things we may need. So we have to work.

In the other hand, other people work, because they love what they do, they enjoy their job and the sense of accomplishment that comes with it. They do it because it is their dream job. Some even hide themselves in their jobs so much, that have no time to build relationships. But no matter why they do it, it has nothing to do whit how much they earn. Of course, people need to get paid since this is important as well. But it is not the main concern for some workers.

In conclusion, love for our jobs are more important than anything else, especially the money we earn. What do we do, when we earn a great salary, but hate the jobs we do? In this case there is no sense of accomplishment for any person. In other cases, for instance, Social workers, who of course wants to make a living, but their essential reasons are to help those in needs, to provide a safe environment for humanity and to promote social justice. I'm sure this kind of workers, have many priorities in which money is not a part of it.

TOEFL listening discussions: An assistant lecturer talking to a new student
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Yamilet

[Gray]

It is a good habit not to refute the argument quickly in the same paragraph itself.
Stick with the argument at least for that paragraph. For making counter argument choose new one.

Otherwise, it is a good read.

(I am not a teacher)
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First lesson - English, not english. I, not i. ~A student of English

[Yamilet]

Thank you very much for the advice
I will keep that in mind :)
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Yamilet