Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for longer time. which of these two situations do you think better? Use specific reasons and examples to support you opinion.

There would be different opinion on this topic, depending upon from which part of this world are you? Due to diversity in culture, a person thinks accordingly weather they should be live with their family or should live as soon as possible. Even if most of the young adult wants to live independently but in most of cases parents don’t want lives separate from their child. Even if every parent wants their child to be strong enough but not want to leave them alone in this big world.

In my opinion young adult should prefer to live with their parents for longer time. Reason behind this is that if the family is living together, will be strong family. They can help each other in their indeed. They can share their expenses. Some time if some one is going to lose their job will not affect their whole life if they are living together.

We can take example of this current recession; this is very hard time for so many families. In my building one girl was living alone from long time, after graduation she was able to earn enough so she has been started living alone. But in this tough time she lost their job and again moved in with their parents. It will be easy for all to splitting the expenses such as rent or mortgages, while sharing all utilities and grocery bills

In Conclusion they should separate only if teens need to leave home to go to college out of state, and adults need to take jobs that move them away from the origin otherwise family should live together. In this case we would be able to save some earning and will be able to taking care of each easily.

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