 #2 (permalink) Fri Aug 07, 2009 12:07 pm The structure of creative writing and how to write a good creative writing essay |
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I have not the slightest idea. I got an essay corrected by an Englishman once and all the corrected was linguistic misstakes...
I couldn't find any grammar mistakes like forgetting the plural S for example or using the wrong verbform.
Here it is
From: Bob Cunningham <exw6...@earthlink.net>
Date: Jan 18, 7:55 pm
Subject: What sort or errors do I make when I write in English ?
To: alt.english.usage
On Fri, 18 Jan 2008 00:07:13 -0800 (PST), Maria
<> said:
> I am from Sweden and I wonder what sort of errors I make
> when I write > in English.
I am from Sweden, and I wonder what sort of errors I make
when I write in English.
> Here is an essay I wrote when I had been to Scotland with
> my granny. If I had been a hearing person my English
> would be much better. Hearing people in Sweden they
> learn a lot from TV.
Here is an essay I wrote when I had been to Scotland with my
granny. If I were a hearing person my English would be much
better. Hearing people in Sweden learn a lot from TV.
> I now I make many errors with prepositions but the
> are no good rules for prepositions.
I know I make many errors with prepositions but there
are not enough good rules for prepositions.
======= Begin essay =======
> My journey to Scotland
> My granny and I started our journey to Scotland from
> Helsingborg. The aim for the journey was Scotland. We
> went to Scotland by coach. We were only in Scotland
> for five days, as we were travelling by bus and boat.
My granny and I started our journey from Helsingborg. The
destination of the journey was Scotland. We went there by
coach. We were only in Scotland for five days, because a lot
of the time was taken by the boat and bus trips.
> From Helsingborg we went by boat to Denmark then
> though Denmark to Rödbythere we went by boat to
> Puttgarden in Germany. We spent the second night in Hamm.
> The third day we continued our journey through Germany,
> Belgium, Holland, and France.
From Helsingborg we went by boat to Denmark, then through
Denmark to Rödby. From there we went by boat to Puttgarden
in Germany. We spent the second night in Hamm. The third
day we continued our journey through Germany, Belgium,
Holland, and France.
> We entered the ferry to England in Dunkerque, in
> France to Ramsgate in England. From Ramsgate we
> went to London, where we spent the third night.
We boarded a ferry in Dunkerque (English "Dunkirk"?), in
France, headed for Ramsgate in England. From Ramsgate we
went to London, where we spent the third night.
> While we were in London we seized the opportunity to
> see some of the sights in London. The next day we
> continued out journey to Harrogate. On the way to
> Harrogate we visited Nottingham which is the
> home town of Robin Hood. After visiting Nottingham we
> continued our journey to York before we reached
> Harrogate.
While we were in London we seized the opportunity to
see some of the sights there. The next day we
continued our journey to Harrogate. On the way to
Harrogate we visited Nottingham, which was the
home town of Robin Hood, and we also visited York.
> On Thursday we come home to Aviemore. On the
> way from Harrogate to Aviemore we stopped at
> Durham for a few hours, where we had our lunch.
> After that we continued through North
> Cumberland Nature Reserve. We came to
> Aviemore in the evening. When we had got
> something to eat, we got information about what to
> do in Scotland.
On Thursday we headed for "home" in Aviemore. On the way
there we stopped at Durham for a few hours, where we had our
lunch. We then continued through North Cumberland
Nature Reserve. We arrived in Aviemore in the evening.
When we had had something to eat, we found information
about what to do in Scotland.
> On Saturday we went to Inverness for shopping and
> sightseeing. On the way to Inverness we visited
> Pringle Wool Mill and Kiltmakers. I bought a Pringle
> woollen jumper there.
> (Later my granny said she would give it to me. She
> had though to buy a jumper to me but
> she wanted to be sure about that I liked it, so
> therefore she wanted me to look for it myself.)
(Later my granny said she would give it to me. She
had intended to buy a jumper for me, but she wanted to
be sure that I liked it, so she wanted me to look for it
myself.)
> When I discussed the jumper with the shopkeeper
> and asked her if I could get a tax refund receipt
> and explained I was Swedish she said, I never
> even thought about it I thought you where from
> Britain, she
> said. We usually ask foreigners if they would like
> a tax refund receipt.
When I discussed the jumper with the shopkeeper
I explained that I was Swedish and asked her if I could
get a tax refund receipt. She said, "I never
even thought about it. I thought you where from
Britain. We usually ask foreigners if they would like
a tax refund receipt."
> Then British people say I talk a good English, or if
> they take me for being a native English speaking
> person I feel very proud.
I'm gratified to hear the British people say I speak English
well, and if they take me for being a native English
speaker, I feel especially proud.
> After that we had had lunch, we went to Culloden.
> We came to Inverness in the afternoon. Then most
> of us sized the opportunity to go shopping. We
> came to our hotel in the evening.
After we had had lunch, we went to Culloden. We arrived
in Inverness in the afternoon. Most of us then seized the
opportunity to go shopping. We got to our hotel in the
evening.
> On Sunday we went to see some Scottish castles and a
> whiskey distillery. That day we also went to see
> The Loch Ness Monster Observatory I took a photo of
> it so I have a proof of its exist. After
> visiting the Loch Ness Monster, we visited Urquhart
> Castle. Then we took a boattrip on the Loch Ness
> Sea , before we went to Inverness and "home" to
> Aviemore.
On Sunday we went to see some Scottish castles and a
whisky distillery. (Some people say "whisky" is
Scottish and "whiskey" is Irish.) That day we also
went to see The Loch Ness Monster Observatory. I took
a photo of it, so I have proof that it exists. After
visiting the Loch Ness Monster, we visited Urquhart
Castle. Then we took a boat trip on the Loch Ness Sea
before we went to Inverness and "home" to Aviemore.
> On Monday we visited Edinburgh, the capital of
> Scotland. In Edinburgh we got plenty of
> time for sightseeing. Before we came to Edinburgh we
> got to see a sheep dairying farmyard. That was
> one of the surprises during our visit in Scotland.
> In the evening there was a farewell party, but I didn't
> join in that party because I do hate
> bagpipes which is the "national instrument"
> for Scotland.
On Monday we visited Edinburgh, the capital of
Scotland. There we had plenty of time for sightseeing.
Before we came to Edinburgh we got to see a sheep
dairying farmyard. That was one of the surprises
during our time in Scotland. In the evening there was
a farewell party, but I didn't join that party, because
I hate bagpipes, which are the "national instrument" of
Scotland.
> The next day on Tuesday we started our journey
> home. We left Aviemore on Tuesday for Wrexham.
> On the way to Wrexham we stopped at Gretna Green
> World Famous for runaway marriages. When Scotland
> was independent many youths under age went to
> Gretna Green for marrying as marriage under 18
> years old was forbidden in England by
> then. After visiting Gretna Green we went through
> the Lake District, which is said to be one of the
> most beautiful region of England, to Wrexham in
> Wales.
The next day, Tuesday, we started our journey
home. We left Aviemore for Wrexham. On the way to
Wrexham we stopped at Gretna Green, which is world
famous for runaway marriages. When Scotland
was independent many people who under aged went to
Gretna Green to be married, as marriage under 18
years of age was forbidden in England then. After
visiting Gretna Green we went to Wrexham in
Wales, passing en route through the Lake District,
which is said to be one of the most beautiful regions of
England,.
> The next day we started with a sightseeing tour in
> Wales. On the way from Wales to Maidstone we stopped
> in Llangollen for an hour, there we had the
> opportunity to take photos and buy souvenirs. Then we
> left Wales for England again. On the way to Maidstone,
> which was the destination of the day, we visited
> Stratford Upon Avon. We also visited Oxford.
The next day we started with a sightseeing tour in
Wales. On the way from Wales to Maidstone we stopped
in Llangollen for an hour. There we had an
opportunity to take photos and buy souvenirs. Then we
left Wales for England again. On the way to Maidstone,
our destination of the day, we visited Stratford Upon Avon.
We also visited Oxford.
> We came to Maidstone our destination of the
> day late as usual. The next day on Thursday we
> left England, and after the ferry trip to France we went
> through Gent in Belgium to Antverpen where we had
> our lunch.
We arrived in Maidstone, our destination for the day,
late as usual. The next day, Thursday, we left England,
and after the ferry trip to France we went through Gent
(English "Ghent") in Belgium to Antverpen (English
Antwerp), where we had lunch.
> In Antverpen we got pancakes. I don't know if pancakes
> are a speciality of Belgium, but I didn't like
> the way they served it. They served it with
> ice-cream and chocolate sauce. When we had had our
> lunch we went though Belgium and Germany in
> Ludenscheild where we spend the night. After
> breakfast the next day we travelled through Bremen and
> Hamburg to Puttgarden
In Antverpen we got pancakes. I don't know if pancakes
are a specialty of Belgium, but I didn't like
the way they served them, which was with ice-cream and
chocolate sauce. When we had had our lunch, we went though
Belgium to Ludenscheild in Germany. where we spent the
night. After breakfast the next day we travelled through
Bremen and Hamburg to Puttgarden.
> The end of the destination was through Falster and
> Själland. We arrived in Hellsingborg about 8 o'clock
> p.m. The next day all people who was living in
> Stockholm or North of Stockholm went to Stockholm with
> a charter bus.
The end of our trip was through Falster and Själland. We
arrived in Hellsingborg about 8 p.m. The next day everyone
who lived in Stockholm or North of Stockholm went to
Stockholm on a charter bus.
> I must say that the journey to Scotland was very
> successful for me because I had both an English teacher
> and a Sign language interpreter. I also got many
> opportunities to talk a lot of English. When we
> stopped in Llangollen and when we were in Edinburgh I had opportunity
> to talk a lot of English.
I must say that the journey to Scotland was very
successful for me because I had both an English teacher
and a sign language interpreter. I also got many
opportunities to talk a lot of English, especially when
we stopped in Llangollen and when we were in Edinburgh.
> I went into many bookshops in both Edinburgh and
> Llangollen and started to ask about how to find
> certain books. I only asked about books about the
> English language and jokes books. Then the
> bookkeeper, who could hear I was not British me
> where I come from and so on. My
> pronunciation in English is far from perfect. But
> I must say I try my best to improve my pronunciation. ,
I went into many bookshops in both Edinburgh and
Llangollen and asked how to find certain books. I only
asked about books about the English language and joke books.
Then the bookkeeper, who could hear I was not British, asked
me where I was from and so on. My pronunciation in English
is far from perfect, but I try hard to improve my
pronunciation.
======= End essay ======
What's a "sheep dairying farm". It sounds like they raise
the sheep for their milk.
Is there really a "Loch Ness Sea". A body of water can be a
lake, a loch, a sea, or an ocean. "Loch Ness Sea" sounds at
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