Story: Once upon a time there lived a king. He was survived by his wife...

[Hema Bernard]

Dear Mr.Kitos,

For a cahnge I have written a story could u please edit it. - Thanks Hema

Once upon a time there lived a king. He was survived by his wife and twin sons and their names were Abhay and Abhi.

King was ruling the kingdom very well. He was capable and furious person. All the enemies around his kingdom were scared to enter into his kingdom or attack him.

All the people in his kingdom were very happy and leading a peaceful life. The King died after few years of his sons’ birth. Abhay & Abhi were too young to rule the kingdom so the power was given to their maternal uncle.

He became selfish after getting the power he didn’t wanted to take back the power after Abhay & Abhi are grown up and also learnt that Abhi was smarter than Abhay and it wasn’t easy to cheat Abhi. So he planned to kill Abhi.

But unfortunately one day Abhay, Abhi and the soldiers went to forest for hunting while hunting for animals Abhi reached mid of the forest and lost the way. Soldiers went looking for him till the sun dawn but they couldn’t.

They all left the forest, as they couldn’t trace Abhi and also it was going to be dark soon.

Abhay explained to the queen and she was inconsolable. His uncle was very happy with the news and assumed that the wild animals would have killed as he was too young to save himself.

The days passed as the clouds and the Abhay also grew up. The day was announced for Abhay to take oath as a King.

Though he was grown up, but he was not mentally matured. It’s because his maternal uncle bought him up as a foolish. Abhay was still playfull, he didn’t know how to rule and was giving a silly punishment for the offenders.

When Abhi lost his ways he went on the path as it was going and met Mr.M a wrestling master. Mr.M bought him up as his son and thought him all the skillful stunts and Abhi grew up as a matured man.
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Some days later Abhi came to know the enemies are planning to capture his father’s kingdom as his brother Abhay was not a capable man to fight back and also he wasn’t skilled in the war field.

Abhi planned to kidnap his brother Abhay & kept him in a remote place, so that he could replace Abhay in the palace. As Abhi planned everything worked well and he went to palace.

Abhi understood the culprit behind is his maternal uncle. Abhi also learnt all his plans and took over the power and started to rule.

He fought furiously with enemies and saved the kingdom. By the time his uncle learnt who he is; Abhi arrested him and put him the jail.

Then Abhi brought his brother Abhay to palace and explained about their uncle and his criminal tactics.

Finally everybody came to know the Abhi was alive and ruling authority was given to Abhi & Abhay. They all lived together happily there after and also people in the kingdom felt as if their king was back to rule again.

[Kitosdad]

Once upon a time there lived a king. He was survived by his wife and twin sons and their names were Abhay and Abhi.

(The) King was ruling the kingdom very well. He was (a) capable and furious person. All the enemies around his kingdom were scared to enter into his kingdom or attack him.

All the people in his kingdom were very happy and leading peaceful li(ves).
The King died after few years of his sons’ birth. Abhay & Abhi were too young to rule the kingdom so the power was given to their maternal uncle.

He became selfish after getting the power (and)he didn’t (want) to (give) (it back) after Abhay & Abhi (were) grown up.

(He) also learnt that Abhi was smarter than Abhay, and it wasn’t easy to cheat Abhi. So he planned to kill Abhi.

But unfortunately one day Abhay, Abhi and the soldiers went into (the) forest (to hunt). (W)hile hunting for animals Abhi reached mid - forest and lost (his) way.
Soldiers went looking for him till the sun dawn but they couldn’t (find him.).

They all left the forest, as they couldn’t trace Abhi and also it was going to be dark soon.

Abhay explained to the queen and she was inconsolable.
His uncle was very happy with the news and assumed that the wild animals would have killed (Abhi) as he was too young to save himself.

The days passed as the clouds and Abhay grew up. The day was announced for Abhay to take (the) oath as King.

(Although) he was grown up, he was not mentally matured. It (was) because his maternal uncle (had) bought him up as a fool.
Abhay was still playful, he didn’t know how to rule and was giving silly punishment(s) for the offenders.

When Abhi l(had) ost his way he (followed) the path and met Mr.M a wrestling master. Mr.M bought him up as his son and (taught) him all the skilful stunts and Abhi grew up as a mature man.
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Some days later Abhi came to know(that) enemies (were) planning to capture his father’s kingdom as his brother Abhay was not a capable man to fight back, and he wasn’t skilled in the war field.

Abhi planned to kidnap his brother Abhay & (keep) him in a remote place, so that he could replace Abhay in the palace. As Abhi planned everything worked well and he went to (the) palace.

Abhi understood the culprit behind (all of the plans was) his maternal uncle. Abhi also learnt all of his plans and took over the power and started to rule.

He fought furiously with enemies and saved the kingdom. By the time his uncle learnt who he (was); Abhi arrested him and put him the jail.

Then Abhi brought his brother Abhay to (the) palace and explained about their uncle and his criminal tactics.

Finally everybody came to know the Abhi was alive, and (the) ruling authority was given to Abhi & Abhay. They all lived together happily thereafter and also people in the kingdom felt as if their king was back to rule again.

A delightful story Hema. Well done.

Kitos.
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[Hema Bernard]

Thank You Mr.Kitos,