Essay: After enjoying the benefits of media entertainment, people begin...

[Yiwu5346]

Dear teachers,

when i am writing my essay on media, a sentence is confusing me.
"After enjoying the benefits of media entertainment, people begin rethinking the modification of media function, which contributes the debate on the role of media in our rapidly involving society. " Does this sentence make sense.

Thank you for your answer.

[Mister Micawber]

After enjoying the benefits of media entertainment, people begin rethinking the changes in media function, which contributes to the debate on the role of media in our rapidly evolving society.
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Native English teacher at Mister Micawber's

[Yiwu5346]

Thank you. Mr Micawber.

Really help me a lot....My English writing should be improved a lotttttt....