TOEFL® essay: A new country

[Richard]

When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the custom of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices. Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details.

A new country, new people, new tradition! Life in a foreign country is hard- how can it be otherwise? How can you behave? These questions bring up a controversial topic that I discussed with a friend of mine who had left his country for schooling the other month. From his point of view, there is a sea of difference between hearing about and experiencing overseas firsthand. As far as I am aware, nowadays, people have much in common. The ongoing process of globalization, which contributes to the combination of sociocultural factor, makes it easy to live somewhere else and follow their customs. In other words, “human blood is all of a color.” Nevertheless, it is still an understatement to say we are alike.

In a new country, one might encounter significant differences such as communication and language. I believe that the solution lies in flexibility when you settled in a new country. Moreover, since your identity and your ancestors’ tradition are closely intertwined, you must not completely ignore them. You need to maintain some of your own custom because they are part of who you are.

Furthermore, it is undoubtedly clear that in a foreign country, keeping an age-old custom could help one to overcome the upcoming culture trauma, and change strange feeling to being-at-home feeling. Furthermore, your own custom is a part of your identity that you must not lose it. Accepting the new traditions, on the other hand, will help one to adapt to the new circumstance. In my opinion, you should behave as if you are a resident of there, otherwise; it would inevitably leads to inability to make new friends with high probability of getting “social anxiety”.

In addition, it is my invincible belief that in a foreign country you are supposed to assimilate into the community, and follow there customs as much as possible because in some cases, in particular, you can do nothing and you have to behave in adherence to their principles. For instance, In contrast to Islamic countries with Islamic calendar, in the west, Gregorian calendar is used. Therefore, adaptability is a priceless asset for living abroad.

Taking the above-mentioned instances and reason into consideration verifies that every country has its own “dos and don’ts” and it has shown that the benefits of the adjustment outweigh the disadvantages. Therefore, one of the top priorities that should be contemplated before relocating to a new country is gaining some insight into their etiquette and customs. In consequence, finding a proper balance between the two is a brilliant idea.

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[Yamilet]

Good essay :)
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[Richard]

Hi. It's kind of you to say that.
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[Silky]

I think your essay is really good. The use of vocabulary is amazing.

[Richard]

Hi Silky.
your comment inspired confidence in me.
Thanks.
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[Kitosdad]

A new country, new people, new tradition!
Life in a foreign country is hard- how can it be otherwise? How can (should) you behave?
These questions bring up a controversial topic that I discussed with a friend of mine who had left his country for schooling the other month.
From his point of view, there is a sea of difference between hearing about and experiencing overseas firsthand.
As far as I am aware, nowadays, people have much in common.
The ongoing process of globalization, which contributes to the combination of sociocultural factor(s), makes it easy to live somewhere else and follow their customs. In other words, “human blood is all of a color.”
Nevertheless, it is still an understatement to say we are alike.

In a new country, one might encounter significant differences such as communication and language.
I believe that the solution lies in flexibility when you (settle) in a new country. Moreover, since your identity and your ancestors’ tradition(s) are closely intertwined, you must not completely ignore them.
You need to maintain some of your own custom(s) because they are part of who you are.

Furthermore, it is undoubtedly clear that in a foreign country, keeping an age-old custom could help one to overcome the upcoming cultur(al) trauma, and change (the) "stranger" feeling to "being-at-home" feeling.

Furthermore, your own custom is a part of your identity that you must not lose. Accepting the new traditions, on the other hand, will help one to adapt to the new circumstance(s).
In my opinion, you should behave as if you are a resident of there, otherwise; it would inevitably lead to (an) inability to make new friends with (an even higher) probability of getting “social anxiety”.

In addition, it is my invincible belief that in a foreign country you are supposed to assimilate (integrate) into the community, and follow the(ir) customs as much as possible because in some cases, in particular, you can do nothing and you have to behave in adherence to their principles.
For instance, (i)n contrast to Islamic countries with Islamic calendar, in the west, (the) Gregorian calendar is used.
Therefore, (the ability to adapt) is a priceless asset for living abroad.

Taking the above-mentioned instances and reason(s) into consideration,(they) verify that every country has its own “dos and don’ts,” and it has shown that the benefits of the adjustment outweigh the disadvantages.

Therefore, one of the top priorities that should be contemplated before relocating to a new country, is gaining some insight into their etiquette and customs.
In consequence, finding a proper balance between the two is a brilliant idea.

A good essay Richard.
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[Richard]

Thanks a million Kitos.

[Kitosdad]

Good morning Richard. Yes, the meaning is almost identical.

My insertion was to provide an alternative choice of word, which hopefully would help others improve their vocabulary.
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[Richard]

Howdy !
morning Mr. kind...
you are our troubleshooter and everybody likes you.
Thank you.
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[Aitorzl]

well done Richard.. I've just read a couple of your essays and the way you use your vocabulary is really good...and you have a brooooaaaad one... keep up the good work .... :wink:

[Richard]

Howdy!
Thank you. sure!
Wish you luck.
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[Silky]

Excellent job Richard. Really you are getting grip in your essay's. Even I am practicing since long time but not doing perfect like you or yamilet.

keep it up.