TOEFL® essay The elderly people has their own way to enjoy

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Every adult at list ones on there life taught about being old and what going to happen when she/he will became old? Will they enjoy there life again as they used to enjoyed? Will they have strength and desire to live as they used to have? I believe that this type of question coming not only across my mind, also it bothers many people as well. Any time when I think of elderly people, I'm questioning my self, do the elderly people enjoy their life? Do they have same desire and performance as they used to have? I've heard from many people, that they don't wont to became old, that elderly people has very miserable life or not life at all, and maybe nothing to enjoy at old age! Some youth begins to catch up everything while there are young, some, don't bothered of their age. I used to observed my parents for period of time, I looked at their life very carefully, and I used to studied every single moment in their life while I was with them, and the must interesting thing I've discovered, is that, elderly people has their own way to enjoy. Yes, when you are approaching to certain age group, with your changing face and body, yours desire and performances begins to changes to. What you used to like while you were young, you may not like it anymore, what were makes you happy, may not excites you anymore. But it doesn't mean that you wont have happiness as you were having when you were young. I've founded that old people enjoys their life by traveling, meeting a friends, shopping, or even just sitting at home and watching TV. They enjoy their life in their own way. I believe that they enjoy every single moment in their life.

Please valuate my essay, I'm going to sit TOEFL test in October, I just want to know how is my writing skill.

Thank you,

Natalie

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