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#1 (permalink) Mon Sep 28, 2009 9:34 am Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,... |
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Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
Many governments ponders this days on whether to improve roads and highways or spending huge sum of money on improving public transportation like buses, trains and subways. I believe that buses, trains and subways can only function well when roads and subways are improved. In the following paragraghs, I will explain why governments should spend money on roads and highways first rather than on public transportation.
Firstly, in the absences of roads and highways, one will not talk of public transportation. Buses, trains and subways transportation have been made available because there are roads and highways. In my country, there nature of roads and highways are very poor and the outcome of the state of this roads are the numerous accidents that occured everyday. So, if the government improve the the state of these roads and highways first, it will be creating a health environment for public transportation.
Secondly, the growth of a country greatly depends on its roads and highways systems. For example, in an under developed country like Cameroon, almost all Companies need raw materials with which are mostly found in the royal areas. Though they have have good vehicles to transport these products, it is not easy because of the nature of the roads and highways linking the urban areas and the cities. Like wise, if more money was spent on highways and roads, fewer vehicles could be used to transport huge amount of the raw materials to the urban areas.
Further more, some countries are now having specific type of cars to buy because of the the poor state of roads and highways. A very good example is my country where one has to buy but a "4x4" vehicle if he or she intends to travel to most locations of the country. This vehicle is very expensive and does not make things easy for citizens of a country. By this, improving on the state of roads and highways will permit citizens not to bother chosing a type of public transportation to use.
From the above explanation, if goverments improve their roads and highways first, it will make life worth living for people in royal areas, Companies and above all boost the economy of governments. So, governments should think of improving on their roads and highways first and public transportation later.
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Nzuahp I'm here quite often ;-)

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#2 (permalink) Mon Sep 28, 2009 9:50 am Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,... |
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hii nzuhap good essay...i also wrote essay on same topic today...our views almost match...
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#3 (permalink) Mon Sep 28, 2009 9:53 am Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,... |
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hi Sandeep, I posted it and later discover that you have written yours on the same topic. Lets keep on going. Nzuahp _________________ Practice makes perfect |
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#4 (permalink) Mon Sep 28, 2009 12:05 pm Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,... |
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Many governments (ponder these) days on whether to improve roads and highways or spending huge sums(s) of money on improving public transportation like buses, trains and subways. I believe that buses, trains and subways can only function well when roads and subways are improved. In the following paragraghs, I will explain why governments should spend money on roads and highways first rather than on public transportation.
Firstly, in the absences of roads and highways, one will not talk of public transportation. Buses, trains and subways transportation have been made available because there are roads and highways. In my country, the nature of roads and highways (is) very poor and the outcome of the state of (these) roads are the numerous accidents that occured everyday. So, if the government improve the the state of these roads and highways first, it will be creating a health(y) environment for public transportation.
Secondly, the growth of a country greatly depends on its roads and highways systems. For example, in an under developed country like Cameroon, almost all companies need raw materials which are mostly found in the royal areas. Though they have have good vehicles to transport these products, it is not easy because of the nature of the roads and highways linking the urban areas and the cities.
(Likewise,) if more money was spent on highways and roads, fewer vehicles could be used to transport huge amount(s) of raw materials to the urban areas.
(Furthermore,) some countries are now having (to buy) specific type of cars because of the the poor state of roads and highways. A very good example is my country (is) where one has to buy a "4x4" vehicle if he or she intends to travel to most locations of the country. This vehicle is very expensive and does not make things easy for citizens of a country. By this, improving on the state of roads and highways will permit citizens not to bother chosing a (particular) type of public transportation to use.
From the above explanation, if goverments improve their roads and highways first, it will make life worth living for people in royal areas, companies, and above all boost the economy of governments.
So, governments should think of improving their roads and highways first and public transportation later.
Nzuahp, a very well written essay, with only a few faults. Your sentence constuction is very good, and your opinion too.
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#5 (permalink) Mon Sep 28, 2009 12:55 pm Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,... |
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Thanks a million kitosdad, I am short of words to express my satisfaction. I will take down those corrections and make sure not to repeat them in the next essays. Nzuahp _________________ Practice makes perfect |
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#6 (permalink) Mon Sep 28, 2009 18:39 pm Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,... |
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Hi Nzuahp. sorry for tardy reply.
384 words in your essay= acceptable In my opinion, your essay is totally good.
I have made some points.
1- you make some typos that might happent to everyone, such as: 1-goverments (governments) 2-chosing(choosing) 3-paragraghs(paragraphs) 4-occured (occurred) and you repeat some words: the (the=delete repeated word) 2- If I were you I would maintain the advantages and disadvantages of each way then I'll compare them to figure out which one is better. many thanks. _________________ The limits of my language are the limits of my universe.
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#7 (permalink) Mon Sep 28, 2009 19:42 pm Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,... |
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Hello Richard and Nzuahp...
When it comes to count how many words your essay has; do you count articles and pronouns for example? I was wondering...
all the best for you both....
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#8 (permalink) Mon Sep 28, 2009 20:14 pm Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,... |
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pronouns, adjective, adverb, verb, noun and auxiliary verbs, conjunctions and interjections. I mean words. I count the words of whole text, not article. _________________ The limits of my language are the limits of my universe.
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#9 (permalink) Tue Sep 29, 2009 8:39 am Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,... |
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Hi Richard, I wrote the essay directly in the forum and was also respecting the thirty (30) minutes time as it is the case in the real exam and I didn't have enough time to browse through for corrections.
As for the number of words, it is later I checked and discovered that the essay contents 384 words.
Thanks a lot for the effort you have made to browse through the essay to trace those spelling errors. The correction is humbly welcome.
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