What are some of the experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you

[Silky]

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What are some of the experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live now?

Experience makes life better. Everyone learns from the experience. Some times you had a bad experience. Sometimes people converts their experience as a source of their inspiration but some takes it in a negative direction. So it is on you weather you wants to learn from an experiences. Experience is the lesson of life. As some one said, Experience is not what happens to a man; it is what a man does with what happens to him. You should take it in a positive way. Personally, I had so many experienced in the short time of life and I can say Experience is the best teacher. I had learned through my job hunting experience and once when I had a conflict with one of my friend.

To begin with, I have an instance of my Job hunting. When I graduated from the college, I had been planning for the further study. My father died suddenly. Dad's death has impacted my life in so many ways that I hardly know where to start as I had to search job to support my family. At that time I was not well prepared for doing Job, even I had no idea about a job hunting process. While waiting long time for six months, I got a Job. I decided to focus on the job as I have to take care of my family. Today I have again got a chance for the further study. As a result of my experience, I learned that even in some circumstance if you are working on the right track, you can achieve their goals one day.

In addition to that, I had happened one more bad experience in friendship. One of my best friends had been avoiding me when I was in the college. She did not want to talk to me. I was trying to talk to her again and again but she always refused. I was in trouble for long time as I was thinking, why my friend does not want to talk? Then after a long time I talked and resolved the issue with her. That time I learned a small issues can create big conflict if you are not going to resolve it by communication. So in my opinion you should not be silent for long time and it is important that you try to resolve the issue through communication.

To conclude, experience is the lesson man learns from life. In brief, the idea is that past experiences influence future experiences. All experiences, impact on one's future, for better or worse. Basically, cumulative experience either shuts one down or opens up one's access to possible future experiences.

[Kitosdad]

[Silky]

Mr. Kitos hope you don't mind helping me again.I am posting again this essay with my corrections. Please have a look on it.Thanks a lot for your correction,I am very grateful for all the aide I got from you.


Experience makes life better. Everyone learns from an experience. Sometimes people had a bad experience. Some people convert their experience as a source of their inspiration but some people feel negative about a bad experience. So it is on you whether you want to learn from an experience.

Experience is the lesson of life. As someone once said, an experience is not what happens to a man; it is what a man does with what happens to him. You should take it in a positive way. Personally, I have had so many experiences in the short time. I can say experience is the best teacher. I had learned through my job hunting experience and once when I had a conflict with one of my closest friends.

To begin with, I have an instance of my job hunting. When I graduated from the college, I had been planning for a further study. My father died suddenly. Dad's death has impacted my life in so many ways that I hardly know where to start as I had to find a job to support my family. At that time I was not well prepared for doing a job. I did no have any idea about a job hunting process. Finally I got a job offer. I decided to focus on that job as I have to take care of my family. Today I have again got a chance for a further study. As a result of my experience, I learned that even in some circumstance if you are working on the right track, you can achieve those goals one day.

In addition to that, I have had a one more bad experience in friendship. One of my best friends had been avoiding me when I was studying in the college. She did not want to talk to me. I was trying to talk to her again and again but she always refused. I was in trouble for a long period as I was thinking, why my friend does not want to talk? Then again in the starting of my next semester I talked and resolved the issue with her. What I learned is that a small issue can create a big conflict if you are not going to resolve it by communication. So in my opinion you should not be silent for a long time and it is important that you try to resolve the issue through communication.

To conclude, experience is the lesson man learns from life. In brief, the idea is that past experiences influence future experiences. All experiences, impact on one's future, for better or worse. Basically, cumulative experience either shuts one down or opens up one's access to possible future experiences.

[Kitosdad]

Experience makes life better. Everyone learns from experience. Sometimes people ha(ve) a bad experience. Some people convert their experience (into) a source of inspiration, but some people feel negative about a bad experience. So it is on you whether you want to learn from an experience.

Experience is the lesson (that) life (teaches us all).
As someone once said; "An experience is not what happens to a man; it is what a man does with what happens to him".
You should take it in a positive way.
Personally, I have had so many experiences in (my) short (lifetime).
I can (definitely) say that experience is the best teacher.
I had learned through my job hunting experiences, and once when I had a conflict with one of my closest friends.

To begin with, I (had) an instance (during) my job hunting.
When I graduated from-----college, I had been planning (to study further).
My father died suddenly. Dad's death has impacted my life in so many ways that I hardly know where to start, as I had to find a job to support my family.

At that time I was not well prepared for doing a job. I (had no) idea about (the) job hunting process. Finally I got a job offer.
I decided to focus on that job as I have to take care of my family.
Today I have again got a chance (to) study.
As a result of (this) experience, I learned that even in some circumstance(s), if you are working on the right track, you can achieve your goals one day.

In addition to that, I have had one more bad experience in (my) friendship. One of my best friends had been avoiding me when I was studying in ---- college.
She did not want to talk to me.
I was trying to talk to her again and again but she always refused.
I was (troubled) for a long period as I was (wondering) why my friend (didn't) want to talk?
Then again (at the start) of my next semester (we) talked and resolved the issue. What I learned is that a small issue can create a big conflict if you are not going to resolve it by communication.

So, in my opinion you should not be silent for a long time, and it is important that you try to resolve the issue through communication.

To conclude, experience is the lesson man learns from life.
In brief, the idea is that past experiences influence future experiences.
All experiences, impact on one's future, for better or worse.
Basically, cumulative experience either shuts one down or opens up one's access to possible future experiences.
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Silky, what can I say? That improvement beggars belief. If you continue to learn from your previous errors, and capitalise on your new enthusiasm, then you can reach the top, no problem.

Kitos. I am so impressed by this improvement. Very well done Silky!!!!!!!!
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[Silky]

As always, Thank You!!!