It is better to marry someone who is similar to you rather than someone who is

[Silky]

Hi everyone.
Please give me some comments about my essay.Thank you so much.

It is better to marry someone who is similar to you rather than someone who is different from you.


There has always been a debate on this weather to marry someone who is similar to you rather than someone who is different from you. From a Personal perspective, I am more inclined to marry someone who is similar to me. To me, I that case understanding will be better, married couple doesn’t need to be change ourselves according to each other, and can spend more time together.

To begin with, what we want from our life? In one word we all want happiness in our life. I think if there is inner peace in our life we can adjust in any temperament of life. If husband and wife are living happily under the same roof happily and sharing every moment of their life, how good you will feel there? House will be full of Joy, there will be no crashes and life will be much easier. However Personally, I feel my self very luck to found my husband, we have lot of similarity. Even we are from different part of the country, we have same choices, views and decisions. Our perspective regarding life is common. Conversely there is high chance of conflict if someone is different from in views and interest. If you don't share the same life goals, priorities and values, you will be in constant disharmony. If your goals are to have kids and go vacationing, while his are to play the football and go to the bar, you're going to be pretty miserable, don't you think?

In addition to, married couples do not need to change according to each other. It is the long life relationship. No body wants to change the way of their own living. Same kind of living habit will help them to readjust easily. For example if wife wants to be social but husband does not feel comfortable in social circle then at every occasion they will end-up in fight. On the other way if both are socially active, both will be able to enjoy their parties together, will able to celebrate each others birthday together.

There will be fewer problems in the life while living in the same place if your interests are same. Moreover, if your have same interest, both will be able to spend more time together. They can play together same game or can watch same kind of movie. They don’t have to go in opposite direction to spend their leisure time. How can someone claim to be happy life if they are neither spending quality of time together nor loving pampering each other?

To sum up, then, I think I have shown with some conviction that factor like good understanding, less adjustment and spending time together, all amount to better happy married life. And while I concede that similarity in nature have their own special advantages that can't be matched with different nature, these are the factors that matter most to me. Give me a better reason to marry someone who is similar to me.

[Kitosdad]

[quote="Silky"]Hi everyone.
Please give me some comments about my essay.Thank you so much.

It is better to marry someone who is similar to you rather than someone who is different from you.


There has always been a debate on this weather to marry someone who is similar to you rather than someone who is different from you. From a Personal perspective, I am more inclined to marry someone who is similar to me. To me, I that case understanding will be better, married couple doesn’t need to be change ourselves according to each other, and can spend more time together.

To begin with, what we want from our life? In one word we all want happiness in our life. I think if there is inner peace in our life we can adjust in any temperament of life. If husband and wife are living happily under the same roof happily and sharing every moment of their life, how good you will feel there? House will be full of Joy, there will be no crashes and life will be much easier. However Personally, I feel my self very luck to found my husband, we have lot of similarity. Even we are from different part of the country, we have same choices, views and decisions. Our perspective regarding life is common. Conversely there is high chance of conflict if someone is different from in views and interest. If you don't share the same life goals, priorities and values, you will be in constant disharmony. If your goals are to have kids and go vacationing, while his are to play the football and go to the bar, you're going to be pretty miserable, don't you think?

In addition to, married couples do not need to change according to each other. It is the long life relationship. No body wants to change the way of their own living. Same kind of living habit will help them to readjust easily. For example if wife wants to be social but husband does not feel comfortable in social circle then at every occasion they will end-up in fight. On the other way if both are socially active, both will be able to enjoy their parties together, will able to celebrate each others birthday together.

There will be fewer problems in the life while living in the same place if your interests are same. Moreover, if your have same interest, both will be able to spend more time together. They can play together same game or can watch same kind of movie. They don’t have to go in opposite direction to spend their leisure time. How can someone claim to be happy life if they are neither spending quality of time together nor loving pampering each other?

To sum up, then, I think I have shown with some conviction that factor like good understanding, less adjustment and spending time together, all amount to better happy married life. And while I concede that similarity in nature have their own special advantages that can't be matched with different nature, these are the factors that matter most to me. Give me a better reason to marry someone who is similar to me.

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Silky, need I say more?
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[Topaze]

Silky, you've obviously used EnglishRaven's essay as a framework. This may not be always wrong but make sure you borrow only standard expressions, not entire sentences. Also, realize that there is a number of other mistakes in you essay and that the few flawless parts of it are mostly the ones you copied.

[Silky]

Topaze, I think there is no harm if I am using in the correct way.

English Raven has given a very good example. As far as I know he is the teacher. There is no crime if I am borrowing expressions or whole sentence from his essay as far as I am using it perfectly.

This is the forum, where everyone learns something new from each one. It's not really place to criticize, I hope.

[Topaze]

You are quite correct about criticizing, my apologies. I have removed the word-by-word comparison between the two essays. As for the extent of borrowing, it is probably a matter of personal choice. Some choices, though, can be frown upon at ETS.

[Silky]

Thanks a lot. Anyways I am going to post my correct essay. Let me know what you think.

[Silky]

Thanks a lot Mr. Kitos. Here is my correct essay. Please have a look on it.

There has always been a debate on this whether to marry someone who is similar to you or to someone who is different from you. From a personal perspective, I am more inclined to marry someone who is similar to me. To me, In that case understanding will be better, married couples don’t need to be changed according to each other, and can spend more time together.

To begin with, what we want from our life? In one word we all want happiness in our life. I think if there is inner peace in our life we can adjust in any temperament of life. If husband and wife are living happily under the same roof and sharing every moment of their life, how good they will feel there? That house will be full of joy, there will be no crash and life will be much easier. However, personally I feel myself very lucky to have found my husband. We had a lot in common. Even though we are from the different part of the country, we have same choices, views and decisions. Our perspective regarding life is common. Conversely there is high chance of conflict if someone has different views and interests. If you don't share the same life goals, priorities and values, you will be in constant disharmony. If your goals are to have kids and go vacationing, while his are to play a football and go to a bar, you're going to be pretty miserable, don't you think?

In addition to that, married couples do not need to change according to each other. It is a long life relationship. Nobody wants to change the way of living. A same kind of living habit will help them to readjust easily. For example if she wants to be social but he does not feel comfortable in social circle then at every occasion they will end-up in fight. On the other hand if both are socially active, both will be able to enjoy their parties together, would be able to celebrate each others birthday together.

There will be fewer problems in life while living in the same place. If you are a couple of same interests, both will be able to spend more time together. They can play together common game or can watch common movie. They don’t have to go in different place to spend their leisure time. How can someone claim to be happy life if they are spending quality of time neither together nor loving, pampering each other?

To sum up, then, I think I have shown firm belief that reasons like good understanding, less adjustment and spending time together, all important to better happy married life. And while I concede that similarity in nature has their own special advantages and these are the reasons that matter most to me. Give me a better reason to marry someone who is similar to me.

[Kitosdad]

That's a lot better Silky, although there are still a few glaring errors.

Don't lose sleep over them though. Nothing wrong that can't be put right easily.
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