Happen in the past (Last Vacation in Malang)

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Dear Teacher,

I want to write my story that happen in the past. Would you correct me if i make any mistakes, please ? thanks :)

Last Vacation in Malang
I had a wonderful time when I was on my vacation to Malang, East Java. I had the vacation together with my parents and my sisters.
After I had leave from the office. We went there with my car. The car was very comfortable for me but not for my sister, dila.
She sometime had her head hit on the window. She sat in back chair because her body so big and because of in middle chair was full. This was also my first drive as a driver as well. I'm kind of nervous and panic if something happened so I drove my car carefully. I try to relax and focus. We bought a lot of vitamin and snack to occur and continue.

We left the house early in the morning after we take a fast. We spent the night at Kudus, Middle Java. The expense hotel is not expensive. We had eaten our dinner before we spent the rest of the day in bed that night.

In the following morning, we continue our trip early in the morning. Before we arrived at Malang we visited some of my relative in Gresik and prayed. We arrived in Malang at 2 O'clock PM. We started to visit my family there and visit some different places. We were there for 7 days. We really enjoyed the vacation although we had to spend very much money. I miss my relatives in Malang..

to be continued...