TOEFL® essay: Dating is when two people meet on a special place to talk...

[Carmen Laura]

Dating is when two people meet on a special place to talk,to get to know each other and maybe start a romantic relationship.
some people find dating difficult whereas others find it funny and an excellent opportunity to meet new people.
Datings are difficult for some people that feel shy among new people and are not confident enough to start a conversation or are not good at approaching the opposite sex. For example, men are often the the ones who have much problems dating women,if a man is shy he will have problems dating as they are in most of the times the ones who invite women out so they have to be talkative. Of course that nowadays women are also inviting men out,however many people still have that stereotype that man should invite women out.
Other people find it funny because they can boast about it to their friends about the number of dates they have been into,how good he or she is on dating and how easy it is for him or her to find someone.
In contrast,there are people who take dating pretty serious.For them is an opportunity to meet the man or woman of their dreams.
In my view I don't think it is neither easy nor difficult,it depends on each persons personality.If the person is shy of course it will be difficult, however if the person is extrovert he will face it as an adventure where he can meet the unexpected.
please comment it is very important to me to get your feedback on my essay,because I want to pursue writing so I want to know if I have any chances of succeeding.
Yours truly
Carmen Laura
Mozambique

[Kitosdad]

Good morning Carmen. If your intention is to write in English you should first give some thought to the correct usage of basic grammar.

First, you should always refer to yourself as I, not (i).

Next, you should ALWAYS start a sentence with a capital letter, no matter how short the sentence may be.

I would be glad to make an objective comment on your essay, after you have corrected these GLARING faults in your work.

Kitos.
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[Carmen Laura]

Thank you for the correction I hadn't notice them. I have corrected them now. Can you please give me your comment.

[Kitosdad]

Dating is when two people meet AT a special place to talk,to get to know each other and maybe start a romantic relationship.
(S)ome people find dating difficult, whereas others find it funny and an excellent opportunity to meet new people.

Datings are difficult for some people WHO feel shy WHEN MEETING new people and are not confident enough to start a conversation, or are not good at approaching MEMBERS OF the opposite sex.

For example, men are often the the ones who have MANY problems WHEN dating women.

(I)f a man is shy he will have problems dating as they are, most of the time, the ones who invite women out, so they have to be talkative.
Of course nowadays women are also inviting men out,however many people still have that stereotype that THE man should invite THE women out.

Other people find it funny because they can boast about it to their friends, about the number of dates they have HAD, AND how good he or she is on dating and how easy it is for him or her to find someone.

In contrast,there are people who take dating pretty seriousLY.
For them IT is an opportunity to meet the man or woman of their dreams.

In my view I don't think it is either easy nor difficult. It depends on each persons personality.
If the person is shy of course it will be difficult, however if the person is extrovert THEY will face it as an adventure where THEY can meet the unexpected.

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A decent essay Carmen, with a good sense of sentence structure. Everything fitted well together. Your next one needs to be 50% longer.
If your speaking is as good as your wriing then the test will be fairly easy for you. Well done.

Kitos.
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[Carmen Laura]

Thank you for the comment it means a lot to me. I will make sure to keep on writing and I hope to become good at it.
Carmen Laura
Mozambique

[Kitosdad]

Good afternoon Carmen, you already are good at it. You will become even better in time.

Kitos.
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