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#2 (permalink) Wed Oct 14, 2009 17:40 pm also several paragraphs...not sure about the topic |
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1. About money(can be used to (exemplify) many topics) Earning a lot of money can (benefit) other people, especially the poor. I always sympathize with people living in needy countries. They are so impoverished that they don't even have (the) ability to reach a basic living requirement, such as fresh food and clean water. If I had enough money, I would donate maybe half of my wealth to help them get access to a healthier life.
Of course (I cannot help) everyone, but at least a few people (would be) able to benefit from this sum of money. In addition, I can also (start) a fund to provide them with better education. This way they will acquire (the) necessary knowledge to promote their living conditions, for example they may invent a method to purify the water fetched from the rivers nearby, or they can be (made) aware of how to prevent AIDS.
2. About people's ambition and desire(also almost multifunctional).
Earning a comfortable living is a basic requirement for me in the future. Some people are not that ambitious. They just hope that they can find a decent job that enables them to support their family and their children's education. In face of this global economic crisis, more and more people are going unemployed; (therefor) lowering their living standard would be a good option for them. I guess a lot of people choose to earn a comfortable living just because they realize that a higher objective, a demand for (a) large quantity of money, is too tough to come true under current bleak ambience.
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#3 (permalink) Thu Oct 15, 2009 8:19 am also several paragraphs...not sure about the topic |
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| Kitos, thank you! I wonder what is the difference of "thereby" and "therefore". It's hard for me to tell them apart. |
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Glorning I'm new here and I like it ;-)
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#4 (permalink) Thu Oct 15, 2009 11:37 am also several paragraphs...not sure about the topic |
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Good morning Glorning,
Therefore = “and because of that, _____” Thereby = “doing it like that, _____”
Therefore answers “Why?”. Thereby answers “How?”.
I've confirmed that with Google.
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#5 (permalink) Thu Oct 15, 2009 13:34 pm also several paragraphs...not sure about the topic |
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| Okay...Maybe I need more time to understand that. The time difference is really interesting, I should say good evening to you~cause it's 20:34 now. |
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Glorning I'm new here and I like it ;-)
Joined: 18 Sep 2009 Posts: 38 Location: Beijing, China
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