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#2 (permalink) Sat Oct 17, 2009 11:58 am please rate my essay..please do it soon as i have toefl on 18th |
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In today's world academics are really very important if one need(wants) to stand i( a chance) in this competitive world. (T)he standard of education is rising day by day and because of this there is huge burden on the student's shoulders. (T)hey (work) day and night to get fruitful results.
(N)o doubt studies are very important, and one need(s) to put (in) a lot of effort, but physical exercise plays an important role in ones life.
"(H)ealth is wealth" is a very famous saying which emphasizes the fact that if one is in good health then one can put efforts in(to) other activities. (E)ven new researches has shown that students who do regular physical exercise can concentrate more on studies and thus show better results.
(B)ecause of lack of exercise the cases of obesity ha(ve) also increased in students, and because of this many students at such a tender age are suffering from various heart ailments.
(I) feel that there should be a games period in every school, so that students can relax during that time and can feel free from the burden. This would further enhance (their) growth in academics as well as extra curricular.
Good essay LA, although a little short. Please ENSURE that you start every sentence with a CAPITAL letter, your biggest failing.
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#3 (permalink) Sun Oct 18, 2009 0:14 am Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school |
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Hi Littleangel8786
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| In today's world academics are ..... |
what did you mean by that sentence? You have used academic as a noun and since it is countable you have used it's plural academic(noun)= a teacher in a college or university you meant education, educational degrees or schooling or something else...?
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| they burn day and night oil to get fruitful results. |
why you change the English Idiom? Burn the midnight oil I had read it in the book ("136 American English Idioms" Harry collis- Illustrated by joe Kohl) when I was a kid.. but I do remember this one.
if you work or study long hours at night you can say that burn the midnight oil.
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