TOEFL® essay: Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child's

[Sandy_321]

The topic under discussion is whether classmates or parents influence child's success in school. In my opinion parents contribute a lot in child's success. This is because they share knowledge and wisdom in every stage of child's life. They not only teach academic subjects but also moral and ethical values which are very important building stones for success.

First reason I think parents contribute to success is the time of child's life during which learning’s are teached. It has been said that most of the learning’s that a person remembers is from childhood. This has been proved scientifically also. For example the learning capacity of a child also depreciates with age. An 13 year old can remember easily around 500-600 English words than an 20 year old. The lesser the age the more is the learning capability.Most of the parents impart knowledge during those precious years. So if a child performs well in school then credit goes to parents for playing their part in ensuring good education.

Second reason I think parents are the most important source for child's success is the impact of influence. The degree of influence that child gets from parents is far more than any one else. For example if parents themselves discourage child from going to school then child will loose interest in education and thereby perform poorly in school. A recent survey by an institute revealed that almost 90% of students who do well in their studies have good parental influence.

Finally I think children might perform well in school because of fear. They might fear that parents will scold them if they wont get good numbers in school.
So no matter what might be the reason parents always have great amount of influence on child's performance. There is one adage that parents are the best teachers in the world. I firmly believe this because parental influence and child's performance are inseparable.

[Kitosdad]

The topic under discussion is whether classmates or parents influence (a) child's success in school.
In my opinion parents contribute a lot (to their) child's success. This is because they share knowledge and wisdom in every stage of (the) child's life. They not only teach academic subjects but also moral and ethical values which are very important building stones for success.

Firstly, I think (when parents contribute to success is the time(in a) child's life during which (new subjects) are (taught).
It has been said that most of the (teaching) that a person remembers is from childhood. This has been (proven) scientifically also.
For example, the learning capacity of a child also depreciates with age.
A 13 year old can remember (more) easily around 500-600 English words than a 20 year old.
The (lower) the age, the more (probable)is the learning capability.
Most of the parents impart knowledge during those precious years, so if a child performs well in school then credit goes to (the) parents for playing their part in ensuring (a) good education.

Secondly, the reason I think parents are the most important source for (a)child's success is the impact of influence. The degree of influence that (a)child gets from (its) parents is far more than (from anyone) else.

For example, if parents themselves discourage (a) child from going to school then (the)child will (lose) interest in education and thereby perform poorly in school.
A recent survey by an institute revealed that almost 90% of students who do well in their studies, have good parental influence.

Finally I think children might perform well in school because of fear.
They might fear that parents will scold them if they don't get good numbers in school.
So no matter what might be the reason, parents always have (a) great amount of influence on (a)child's performance.

There is one adage that parents are the best teachers in the world. I firmly believe this, because parental influence and child's performance are inseparable.

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Sandy, this is your best essay by far. You HAVE to take note of ARTICLES. They are the most important part of English grammar. Please read, "How and when to use articles,"
posted here on several threads.

Well done. Now you are showing your improvement.

Kitos.
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[Sandy_321]

Hi kitos,

Thank you for review.
Each review guides me for proper usage of english.
I will take care of articles from now on.

sandy.