TOEFL® essay: Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child's

[Sandy_321]

The topic under discussion is whether classmates or parents influence child's success in school. In my opinion parents contribute a lot in child's success. This is because they share knowledge and wisdom in every stage of child's life. They not only teach academic subjects but also moral and ethical values which are very important building stones for success.

First reason I think parents contribute to success is the time of child's life during which learning’s are teached. It has been said that most of the learning’s that a person remembers is from childhood. This has been proved scientifically also. For example the learning capacity of a child also depreciates with age. An 13 year old can remember easily around 500-600 English words than an 20 year old. The lesser the age the more is the learning capability.Most of the parents impart knowledge during those precious years. So if a child performs well in school then credit goes to parents for playing their part in ensuring good education.

Second reason I think parents are the most important source for child's success is the impact of influence. The degree of influence that child gets from parents is far more than any one else. For example if parents themselves discourage child from going to school then child will loose interest in education and thereby perform poorly in school. A recent survey by an institute revealed that almost 90% of students who do well in their studies have good parental influence.

Finally I think children might perform well in school because of fear. They might fear that parents will scold them if they wont get good numbers in school.
So no matter what might be the reason parents always have great amount of influence on child's performance. There is one adage that parents are the best teachers in the world. I firmly believe this because parental influence and child's performance are inseparable.

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[Kitosdad]

The topic under discussion is whether classmates or parents influence (a) child's success in school.
In my opinion parents contribute a lot (to their) child's success. This is because they share knowledge and wisdom in every stage of (the) child's life. They not only teach academic subjects but also moral and ethical values which are very important building stones for success.

Firstly, I think (when parents contribute to success is the time(in a) child's life during which (new subjects) are (taught).
It has been said that most of the (teaching) that a person remembers is from childhood. This has been (proven) scientifically also.
For example, the learning capacity of a child also depreciates with age.
A 13 year old can remember (more) easily around 500-600 English words than a 20 year old.
The (lower) the age, the more (probable)is the learning capability.
Most of the parents impart knowledge during those precious years, so if a child performs well in school then credit goes to (the) parents for playing their part in ensuring (a) good education.

Secondly, the reason I think parents are the most important source for (a)child's success is the impact of influence. The degree of influence that (a)child gets from (its) parents is far more than (from anyone) else.

For example, if parents themselves discourage (a) child from going to school then (the)child will (lose) interest in education and thereby perform poorly in school.
A recent survey by an institute revealed that almost 90% of students who do well in their studies, have good parental influence.

Finally I think children might perform well in school because of fear.
They might fear that parents will scold them if they don't get good numbers in school.
So no matter what might be the reason, parents always have (a) great amount of influence on (a)child's performance.

There is one adage that parents are the best teachers in the world. I firmly believe this, because parental influence and child's performance are inseparable.

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Sandy, this is your best essay by far. You HAVE to take note of ARTICLES. They are the most important part of English grammar. Please read, "How and when to use articles,"
posted here on several threads.

Well done. Now you are showing your improvement.

Kitos.
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Sandy_321]

Hi kitos,

Thank you for review.
Each review guides me for proper usage of english.
I will take care of articles from now on.

sandy.

[Katezhukova]

Hello Im new here :)
Please, could you be so kind to check my essay on this topic.
Since we were born, all of us have had a great deal of people, such as parents and friends, who loves us and supports. Some people hold an opinion that children’s success at school depends on family due to the fact, that parents are our first teachers. As far as I am concerned, I strongly believe, that classmates are more influential to a child’s life because they have more in common and have no secrets.
During the school time all children are spending the most part of the time at school with their classmates and friends. They have more in common with other children than with their parents. For example, if a kid wants to visit a concert of the favorite group, most probably he will take a friend from the class in which they are studying. I remember my school days when we were spending a great deal of time with my classmates studying, playing, and creating wall newspapers. Furthermore, when we are young we do not listen to our parents and try to follow our classmates’ advice.
Another reason why I agree with the above statement is that I think that when children study at the same school they don’t hide any secrets, such as school marks. As far as they spend a lot of time at school, attending the same subjects, they know about their friends’ successes and fails. For instance, when I was studying at school I always tried to hide bad marks from my parents’ eyes in order not to upset them. But, undoubtedly, all my classmates knew my real grades.
Summing up the beforesaid, we may safely draw the conclusion, that in spite of the fact that parents do their best to influence on their children, classmates are more influential to a kid due to many different reasons. But, I suggest that having more in common with other kids at school and having no secrets are the most essential causes.