TOEFL® essay: How has Internet changed changed your personality and real life...

[Borislav]

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Hi, I have homework to write an essay with heading "How has internet changed your personality and real life relashionship.
Here's my writing:

With the time every person changes its social and intimate life.Joining the global net, the human kind is connecting easier and finding or losing real life relashionship.
Everybody is searching for new exciting friends and events which can make him or her happier.Definitely the virtual web show us one new world ful of new acquaintances and keeping in touch with old comrades.
For example now people find even the love of their dreams in Internet, shifting their work, or just having fun.Conversations are made in some sites, with huge amount of people from different nations.That wider(I'm not sure if this is the right word for getting big) users sight view and is a soul wealth.
On the other hand you surely will waste a lot of time in the chaos web, finding needless and fake information.Also many teens become addicted to the virtual reality and forget or neglect their lifes outside.
In my opinion there are undisputed advantages of Internet as long as you see what helps your personality and ruins it.

[Borislav]

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