 #2 (permalink) Mon Nov 02, 2009 2:14 am Toefl essay: Haste makes waste |
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Hi sel
well, this is a tough topic to write, I have read several essays in this topic and I realize that the most difficulty is lack of idea. It happen to me too. In my opinion, writing some general sentences for this topic, which is an idiom is difficult.we have to clarify our viewpoint more with example rather than general sentences. However we can use advanced structures and words and follow our idea in each paragraph with some related responses to make up for it.
I have made some suggestions:
| Sel wrote: |
"Haste makes waste" This is a wonderful sentence which is absolutely true for me. Haste means to do something in a hurry which causes careless (carelessness). In addition because of haste, we probably get bad qualities(result) which are about food, restaurant. These mean I agree (on/about)this statement.
First of all, Haste makes careless. For instance, If you do something quickly, It will cause careless so that will not be so good. Many years ago, I did my Math exam quickly. I had skipped some easy points and I hadn't read one short questions which hadn't been seen(by who, it's better to use active tense not passive here: which I hadn't seen). Because of these I failed. My score was really awful. Because I was careless ..I didn't pretty well on the exam...which is(was) caused by hurry.
Furthermore, In my opinion haste makes bad quality. For example, when you go to a restaurant to have dinner, you expect a fast service. Because of this they prepare your meal in a hurry. Therefore, this expectation can finish in(result in) a bad quality of food. Moreover I want to give an example from my life.(don't write these kind of sentences in your essays like : I'm writing for you know about what happen to me and what I did, I got my pencil right now and start to ...) My brother and I went to a famous restaurant last year and we ordered our meals. After that, we said to waiter that we haven't more time. Therefore, they prepared our meal in a hurry. Fortunately(unfortunately) our meals were different and their tastes were dreadful.
In conclusion, I really agree with(as far as I know you agree with somebody and agree on/about something) the topic statement which is about haste makes many bad situations. In addition do something in a hurry is harmful. Therefore In my opinion If you have time, don't hurry. I have come to the conclusion that as I said before most people make mistakes when behave in a hurry(when they are in a hurry). |
don't use short forms in your essays:
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don't(short form)= do not
Let me know if you have any suggestions.
Good luck with your writing.
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