In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still srudents.

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Essay: In some countries, teenagers have job whie they are stil students. Do you think this is a good idea

One of the greatest early writers said: “No one knows what he can do still he tries.” That why many countries in the world permit their students to have a job while they still go to school. Although there are many countries don’t agree with that, I very support the permission because of many advantages from it such as: ability discovery, experience development and skill practice.

Mixing with the society, teenagers can learn a lot of things that schools can not provide like real economy and real competition. Moreover, even if schools can give them needed theories, it is necessary for the students to have an environment to practice their knowledge and working as well as having a job is very good way to achieve that goal.

Everyone knows that it’s always important for one to practice his character and try to be a perfect person. Working with others make student more sociable and friendly. Each goal that they achieve makes them more confident and humble, each failure that they have makes them more careful and experienced. That why having job and working are always necessary for everybody.

Finally, students can only absolutely respect their parent’s support if they know what hard earned money is. That means working with their efforts, getting their money and using it will be almost the best way to help students as well as teenagers respect the value of money. They will make students be more saving, which is very important in present changing economy.

Everything always has two sides; in this case, I am sure the number of advantages will always be more than the disadvantages. Practice or teenagers from now, the world will be proud of our young active generation one day.

[Kitosdad]

One of the greatest early writers said: “No one knows what he can do (until) he tries.” That why many countries in the world permit their students to have a job while they (are) still (at) school.
Although there are many countries (that) don’t agree with that, I very (much) support the (practice) because of (the) many advantages from it such as: ability, discovery, experience, development and skill practice.

Mixing with society, teenagers can learn a lot of things that schools (cannot )provide, like real economy and real competition.
Moreover, even if schools can give them (much)needed theories, it is necessary for the students to have an environment (in which) to practice their knowledge and working, as well as having a job is (a) very good way to achieve that goal.

Everyone knows that it’s always important for one to (improve) his character and (to) try to be a perfect person.
Working with others make(s) student(s) (become) more sociable and friendly.
Each goal that they achieve makes them more confident and humble.
(E)ach failure that they have makes them more careful and experienced. That('s) why having (a) job and working are always necessary for everybody.

Finally, students can only (really) respect their parent’s support if they know what "hard-earned" money (means).
That means (that) working (and) getting their money and using it (wisely), will be the best way to help students as well as teenagers (to) respect the value of money.
They will make students be more saving-(concious), which is very important in (the) present changing economy.

Everything always has two sides; in this case, I am sure the number of advantages will always be more than the disadvantages.

(Practice or teenagers from now,) ????????

The world will be proud of our young active generation one day.

Kitos.

Well worded essay, but you must give more time to your study of "Articles" and their usage.
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