TOEFL® essay: The difference of my generation with my parents

[Anniehal]

Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents’ generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

Due to the Open Policy, in the past 30 years, China has developed so fast not only in the field of technology but also concepts and ideas about foreign culture and knowledge. Thus, there are many differences between our generation and our parents’, such as education background and acceptance of new phenomenon.

During the culture revolution in 1960s, studying was discouraged and banned. Numerous well-educated scholars were assigned to rural areas by government and forced to be farmers, which was called “re-educated”. Therefore, people in my parents’ age were not allowed to acquire higher education and did not have good teachers, either. However, this condition is totally reversed in these days and age. We are all persuaded or even forced to gain knowledge as much as we can and university study is definitely common and advocated. Even kindergarten kids are sent to study math, English, etc. We know much more than our parents from anthropology to zoology.

Since the Open Policy, Chinese government put a paramount emphasis on information exchange with foreign countries in order to catch up the developed countries. The increasing contacts with other countries brought us more opportunities to know the outside world and those totally different cultures. Through getting information from internet and foreign friends, we are more open-minded and understandable than our parents.

For example, we may accept and understand sex before marriage and homosexual, but our parents may regard them as ridiculous, unbelievable and terrible phenomenons. They are conservative and traditional due to the education at their age. Moreover, it seems that we feel more free and brave to talk about politics and government decisions, which would be considered dangerous for our parents 30 years ago.
To sum up, the differences between us with our parents are really varied. Compared with them, we are more well-educated, knowledgalbe, broad-minded and understanding. In my point of view, it is a great improvement and development to my country.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a student and a registration clerk during registration week

[Kitosdad]

Due to the Open Policy, in the past THIRTY years, China has developed so fast, not only in the field of technology, but also IN ITS CONCEPTION and ideas OF foreign culture and knowledge. Thus, there are many differences between our generation and THAT OF our parents’, such as education; background and THE acceptance of new phenomenonS.

During the culturAL revolution in THE 1960s, studying was discouraged and banned. Numerous well-educated scholars were assigned to rural areas by OUR government; and forced to WORK AS farmers, which was called BEING “re-educated”.
Therefore, people OF my parents’ age were not allowed to acquire higher education and did not have good teachers, either.
However, this condition HAS BEEN totally reversed in THIS day and age.
We are all persuaded or even forced to gain knowledge as much as we can, and university study is definitely commonPLACE and advocated.
Even kindergarten CHILDREN are sent to study mathEMATICS, English, etc.
We, THE YOUNG GENERATION, know much more than our parents ABOUT anthropology to zoology.

Since the Open Policy, Chinese government'S HAVE PLACED a paramount emphasis on information exchange with foreign countries in order to catch up WITH the developed countries.

The increasing contacts with other countries brought us more opportunities to know the outside world and those totally different cultures.
Through getting information from THE internet and OUR foreign friends, we are NOW more open-minded and understandable than our parents.

For example, we may accept and understand sex before marriage and homosexualITY, but our parents may STILL regard them as ridiculous, unbelievable and terrible phenomenons.

They are conservative and traditional due to the education at their age.
Moreover, it seems that we feel more free and brave to talk about politics and government decisions, which would HAVE BEEN considered dangerous for our parents THIRTY years ago.

To sum up, the differences between us AND our parents are really varied.
Compared TO them, we are more well-educated, knowledgABLE, broad-minded and understanding.

FROM my point of view, it is a great improvement, and A STEP FORWARD IN THE development OF my country.
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A well constructed essay Annie. Well done.

Kitos.
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[Anniehal]

Extremely thank you,kito!!!

[Heleighna35]

I was born in 1974 and my parents were in their 20’s already by that time. Considering the age gap, the most significant discrepancy that I can think of is the modernization of science and technology of infrastructures in my generation. I can say this diversity has greatly affect the livelihood and lifestyle, and has influenced a big difference between my parent's generation and mine.

First, public transportation were more limited in my parent’s generation. Since only a few can afford to buy their own cars, those who don’t own one will have to ride in jeepneys and buses, and endure the hurdles of traffic. In my generation, there are so means of transportation to choose from may it be for short distance to long distance travel. One example is the LRT-light rail transit, which is more faster and convenient thus people arrive safe and on-time to their destinations.

Second, telecommunications are way far behind compare to the latest innovations that are available in the market today. Cell phones and computers have brought the most significant impact in each and everyone’s home. Again, in my parent’s generation, only a few can afford to have telephones at home . Computers were not even available in their time. Thus, to be able to communication to their love ones, they either have to write a letter and drop it at the post office or telegraphic transfer. Today, almost everybody is enjoying the convenience brought about by our modern means of communication not only for personal use but also enhances the growth of our business too.

Lastly,in my parent’s generation, only few courses were offered and most were not even that interested to go to school. The modernization of teachings and school facilities has brought about a quantum leap in the importance of education . Nowadays, there are so many renowned schools to choose from and variety of courses offered. Because of these, students in my generation are enhanced to study more. Tuition fees may be more expensive in my generation, however, still almost everybody is willing to pay the price just to finish a promising degree in a prestigious university.

Consequently, the distinguishing features of infrastructures in each generation has influenced a big difference in the way people live. And because advancement in science and technology is unstoppable, the chain reactions of modernization will surely create more significant changes in the future generations.

.....hello everyone , can somebody help me proofread my essay,this is my first essay actually :-( i'll be taking the toefl exam probably 2 month from now... hope somebody with a good heart can help correct my essay....thank you so much...

[Kitosdad]

Good morning Heleighna, please let me point out that you MUST make a separate post for each new eassy. You can do this by clicking on NEW Post at the top on the thread. That way your work will not be ignored. It is easy to do so when you put your work at the bottom of another person's essay. Thanks.
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I was born in 1974 and my parents were ALREADY IN their 20’s already by that time. Considering the age gap, the most significant discrepancy that I can think of is the modernization of science and technology of infrastructures in my generation. I can say this diversity has greatly affectED the livelihood and lifestyle, and has /influenced/CREATED/ a big difference between my parent's generation and mine.

First, public transportation were WAS more limited in my parent’s generation. Since only a few can COULD afford to buy their own cars, those who don’t DID NOT own one will have HAD to ride in jeepneys and buses, and endure the hurdles of traffic.
In my generation, there are so MANY means of transportation to choose from DEPENDING ON WHETHER may it be for A short distance to OR A long distance THAT YOU WISH TO travel.
One example is the LRT-light rail transit, which is more faster QUICKER and MORE convenient, /thus/THEREBY/ people arrive safe and on-time to their destinations.

Second, telecommunications are WERE way far behind compareD to the latest innovations that are available in the market today.
Cell phones and computers have /brought/MADE/ the most significant impact in each and everyone’s homeS.
Again, in my parent’s generation, only a few can COULD afford to have telephones at home .
Computers were not even /available /THOUGHT OF/ in their time. Thus, to be able to communicatE WITH their loveD ones, they either have HAD to write a letter and drop it at the post office or USE telegraphic transfer.
Today, almost everybody is enjoying the convenience brought about by our modern means of communication, not only for personal use but also enhances the growth of our businessES too.

Lastly,in my parent’s generation, only VERY few courses were offered, and most were not even that interested /to go/IN GOING/ to school.
The modernization of teaching and school facilities has brought about a quantum leap in the importance of education .
Nowadays, there are so many renowned schools to choose from, and A GREAT variety of courses BEING offered.
Because of these, students in my generation are /enhanced/ATTRACTED/ to study more.
Tuition fees may be more expensive in my generation, however, still almost everybody is willing to pay the price just to finish a promising degree in a prestigious university.

Consequently, the distinguishing features of infrastructures in each generation has influenced a /big/GREAT/ difference in the way people live, and because OF THE advancement in science and technology, IT is unstoppable.
The chain reactions of modernization will surely create more significant changes in the future generations.

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I think you need to only do more reading to further improve your standard.
Hopefully you are reading aloud as you do so. This way you will improve two topics at the same time.
I found your essay to be interesting, and some relevant examples were pin-pointed.

Kitos. 7.5/10
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[Heleighna35]

thank you so much kito...i really appreciate the corrections.....i did had a hard time deciding which synonyms to use....also, i have noticed that i have to minimize using the word "the" it makes the sentence direct and simple....again thank you so much....surely i'll try to write another topic...

[Kitosdad]

OK, but make it YOUR essay, and not an addition to another persons, OK.
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[Heleighna35]

honestly kito, i made this essay myself , and since it was my first essay it took me more than an hour to write it....:-) well i guess i will have to be conscious with the time too....the exam usually has 20-30 mins to compose :-(...im writing another essay rightnow....also one of the hardest part is the INTRO:-(