It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.

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018. It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree with that?

“Where should be the best place for children to grow up? in the Countryside or in the city?” is still the question that many people think about. Some people think the countryside with fresh air, peaceful atmosphere and friendly people will be the best place for the children to develop. But in opposite side, I think the children should be brought up in the city because of many advantages that the city can provide.
I haven't ever seen in my life a family move from the city to the countryside in order to give their children the best ground to grow up, but the opposite movement has been seen a lot. In the city, there are many well qualified schools, from primary schools to secondary schools, high schools and colleges as well as universities that are certainly able to provide the best education for their children. There are also many taking care of children services that are very helpful for the parents who sometimes are too busy with works at their offices.
Some people think that the lack of peaceful atmosphere and friendly neighbors in the city will make the children grow up unnaturally but I think differently. Beside qualified education and good services, there are also many parks and play-grounds where everybody can enjoy fresh air and peaceful atmosphere and the children can find many friends at the same age. Moreover the children can also join in various good games or clubs that are always available, and regularly offered in many entertainment centers in the city. The children will be interested and sociable there while they can get bored or have mental problems if they live in the country side where boring actions repeat daily.
Moreover, the children also hardy make their parents worried too much when they are sick due to a lot of modern hospitals in the city. And of course, their parents also don't need to worry too much about their safe because of the perfect security there.
There's no doubt that the children should live in the city in order to grow up healthily and develop their abilities in the best way.

Thank you again.

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I didn't prepare for my first and second essays well, so I saw when there were so many mistakes in my essays. I'm so sorry, after that, I have read more essays and today I post my third essay. If it is still bad, I hope you still check it for me and tell me some advice that can make my essay better

Thank you very much.

018. It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree with that?

“Where WOULD be the best place for children to grow up, in the countryside or in the city?” is still the question that many people ASK.

Some people think the countryside with fresh air, peaceful atmosphere and friendly people, will be the best place for the children to develop.
But in oppositION / ON THE CONTRARY, I think the children should be brought up in the city because of many advantages that the city can provide.
I HAVE NEVER seen in my life A SITUATION WERE a family moveD from the city to the countryside in order to give their children the best ground to grow up, but the opposite movement has been seen a lot.

In the city, there are many well qualified schools, from primary schools to secondary schools, high schools and colleges as well as universities that are certainly able to provide the best education for their children.
There are also many CHILD-MINDING services that are very helpful for the parents who sometimes are too busy with work at their offices.

Some people think that the lack of A peaceful atmosphere and friendly neighboUrs in the city will make the children grow up unnaturally, but I think differently.

IN ADDITION TO qualified education and good services, there are also many parks and play-grounds where everybody can enjoy fresh air and peaceful atmosphere, and the children can MAKE many friends OF THEIR OWN ageS.
Moreover the children can also join in various good games or clubs that are always available, and regularly offered in many entertainment CENTRES in the city.
The children will be interested and sociable there, while they can get bored or have mental problems if they live in the countryside where boring actions repeat daily.

Moreover, the children also hardLy make their parents TOO CONCERNED when they are sick due to THERE BEING lotS of modern hospitals in the city, and of course, their parents also don't need to worry too much about their safeTY because of the perfect security there.
IN MY OPINION there's no doubt that the children should live in the city in order to grow up healthily, and develop their abilities in the best POSSIBLE way.
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Quite a good essay my friend. Kitos.
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thank you, Mr.Kitos
I will be better next time.
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