To complete one project before start another or work on several at the same time?

[Cherry88cn]

Could someone help to revise it? The test comes close...Thanks...

In contemporary society, one of the most perplexingly confronted dilemmas is whether to deal with several projects together or begin to work on them one by one. Those who choose to focus on one single work contend that it is easier with one thing in mind while others argue it is more efficient and effective to handle projects. For my part, I vote for the former one, as it sounds to me to be more reasonable.

To start with, it is generally accepted that we tend to be more careful when we are having one thing at hand. Major false could be avoided to some extent. Imagine a picture that a child who has to do the mathematic homework and biochemical experiment together, it is definitely impossible for him to complete all the task without mistake. For another example, when one of my cousins began to study foreign languages, she chose to study Japanese and Korean languages altogether because she really fascinated by those two languages. However, she soon regretted since she mixed up many words. These cases are not rare, in reality, those who believe they can save time by doing tasks together often find them sticking into an embarrassing situation. Therefore, consequently, they must restart to finish tasks one after another.

Besides, an equally key reason to explain why I advocate doing projects separately is we can never psychologically feel at ease when we are stressed by more than one projects. I just read a study recently published in a Chinese Journal of Higher psychological Research where a neuropsychologist highlighted that, in his experience, "People tend to become nervous when they are facing several assignments at the same time." Apparently, working on more than one task does not seem to be a wise choice.

Finally, to some certain groups like small companies, they need to finish one project and sell it for money immediately and then use the allocated money to start another project. By contrast, when more than one project need to be done, they would be stuck and can not move. If they can not jump from it, the small firms may crack down--they just can not get over it.

Undeniably, sometimes we can do thing at the same time. For instance, we can walk and listen to our mp3. Yet, even it seems quite reasonable, I still see some tragedies like some walkers run against the pillar when he was indulged in music. Nevertheless, taking all these factors into consideration, I am convinced that it is highly advisable for us to pick up one piece of work after another.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a professor and a student discussing a possibility

[Kitosdad]

Could someone help to revise it? The test comes close...Thanks...

In contemporary society, one of the most perplexing dilemmas THAT WE MAY CONFRONT is whether to deal with several projects together or begin to work on them one by one.
Those who choose to focus on one single work contend that it is easier DEALING with one thing in mind while others argue it is more efficient and effective to handle SEVERAL projects SIMULTANEOUSLY .

For my part, I vote for the former one, as it sounds to me to be more reasonable.

To start with, it is generally accepted that we tend to be more careful when we HAVE ONLY one thing at hand.

Major FAULTS could be avoided to some extent. Imagine a picture of a child who has to do mathematics homework and A biochemical experiment together.
IT WOULD definitely BE impossible for him to complete all OF the taskS without MAKING SOME KIND OF mistake.

For another example, when one of my cousins began to study foreign languages, she chose to study Japanese and Korean languages AT THE SAME TIME, because she WAS really fascinated by those two languages.
However, she soon CAME TO REGRET HER DECISION BECAUSE she mixed up many words.
These cases are not rare, in reality, those who believe they can save time by doing tasks together often find themSELVES IN an embarrassing situation. Therefore, AS A CONSEQUENCE, they must restart, to finish tasks one after another.

ANOTHER equally key reason to explain why I advocate doing projects separately is THAT we can never psychologically feel at ease when we are stressed by more than one project.

I HAVE just FINISHED readING a study recently published in a Chinese Journal of Higher psychological Research, where a neuropsychologist highlighted that, in his experience, "People tend to become nervous when they are facing several assignments at the same time." Apparently, working on more than one task does not seem to be a wise choice.

Finally, to some certain groups like small companies, THAT need to finish one project and sell it for money immediately, and then use the allocated money to start another project. By contrast, when more than one project needS to be done, they would be stuck and can not move ON.

If they cannot WORK ROUND IT, the small firms may BREAK-down...they just can not get over it.

Undeniably, we can do SOME thingS at the same time.
For instance, we can walk and listen to our mp3 AT THE SAME TIME. Yet, even THOUGH THIS seems quite COMMONPLACE, I still see some tragedies like WHEN walkers WALK INTO A pillar when THEY ARE LISTENING TO music.

Nevertheless, AFTER taking all OF these factors into consideration, I am STILL convinced that it is highly advisable for us to pick up one piece of work after another.

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Well done. Kitos.
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[Cherry88cn]

Thank you so much for your help...
I have a couple of question to ask you:
1. Someone told me word like "contend","argue","claim" should never be used to replace "say" because they can only be used to claim some rights or something like that. Then what words should I use to replace "say" or "believe"? They are overused and informal...

2.I was told "To begin with" "First and foremost" belong to spoken English. Then how should I indicate the first point, the second point and so on? Is something like "First of all" or "Firstly" have been overused too?

I really appreciate your help...

[Kitosdad]

Thank you so much for your help...
I have a couple of question to ask you:
1. Someone told me word like "contend","argue","claim" should never be used to replace "say" because they can only be used to claim some rights or something like that. Then what words should I use to replace "say" or "believe"? They are overused and informal...

Dear Cherry, I find the introduction to every essay posted here "overused" Forget whatever you were told. Your essay is your work and the examiners will see it that way. In fact, here in Germany, most students are shown exactly how to begin an introduction to each paragraph. Imagine just how "overused " their essays must appear!
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2.I was told "To begin with" "First and foremost" belong to spoken English. Then how should I indicate the first point, the second point and so on? Is something like "First of all" or "Firstly" have been overused too?

You could say in your opening that you will illustrate your opinions in numerical sequence.
1.
2.
3.
4.

I feel that you are being coerced into problems that don't really carry very much weight.
Concentrate on your essay.
Rule one. Keep it simple.
Rule two. Keep it flowing.
Rule three. Keep it interesting.

Kitos. Good luck.
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