TOEFL® essays: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside...

[Wendeus]

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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop you essay.
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It is much better for children to grow up in a big city than in the countryside. In a big city children will have a diversity of options and opportunities. There are a lot of reasons to be in a big city some of those reason are availability of many cultures also lots of educational options and many opportunities in kind different jobs.

In the world of today, big cities commonly have a great variety of cultures. These cultures became from other people of different countries. For example, Latin American immigrants, who moved to Europe, are helping to increase the European culture providing new thing from their own culture in many ways like music, literature and theater. This great diversity of cultures is something really uncommon in the countryside.

In the big cities is possible to find a lot of educational options like universities and schools. For that reason parents will have many options to choose a wonderful school which prepare their children for the future. In other hand, children could have fantastic options to choose a any career that they want. This is very difficult to have also in the countryside.

Nowadays, people have to fight in a competitive job market around the world. Growing up in a big city probably makes the difference in this fight. Children, who live in a big city, will have a huge diversity of jobs in the future. Jobs, which normally would not be available in the countryside. A case of point is, children in the countryside will never have jobs like astronaut, computer analyst or project manager, Because of the level of specialization needed to get these jobs. Level specialization that is available in a big city universities.

As a conclusion, countryside is a very nice place to a holyday or vacations but a big city is the better place for children to grow up. Your kids will have a great diversity of options in culture, education and job opportunities.

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[Kitosdad]

It is much better for children to grow up in a big city than in the countryside. In a big city children will have a diversity of options and opportunities. There are a lot of reasons to be in a big city some of those reason are THE availability of many cultures, also lots of educational options and many opportunities in different KINDS OF jobs.

In the world of today, big cities commonly have a great variety of cultures. These cultures came from other people of different countries.
For example, Latin American immigrants, who moved to Europe, are helping to increase the European culture, providing new thingS from their own culture in many ways like music, literature and theater. This great diversity of culture is something really uncommon in the countryside.

In the big cities IT is possible to find a lot of educational options, like universities and schools.
For that reason parents will have many options to choose a wonderful school which WILL prepare their children for the future.
ON THE other hand, children could have fantastic options to choose any career that they want. This is ALSO AN OPTION THAT WILL BE very difficult to FIND in the countryside.

Nowadays, people have to fight in a competitive job market ALL around the world. Growing up in a big city probably makes A BIG difference in this fight. Children, who live in a big city, will have a huge diversity of jobs in the future.
Jobs, which would normallynot be available in the countryside.

A case of point is, children in the countryside will never have jobs like AN astronaut, A computer analyst or A project manager, because of the level of specialization needed to get these jobs. Level specialization that is available in big city universities.

As a conclusion, THE countryside is a very nice place to TAKE a holIday or vacation, but a big city is the better place for children to grow up. Your kids will have a great diversity of options in culture, education and job opportunities.
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Kitos.
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