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#2 (permalink) Thu Jan 07, 2010 10:58 am Compare and contrast the way of life that you and your parents live. |
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Sm, this essay should have been an open door for you to display your abilities. You failed to do so simply because you appeared to be in a hurry to do something else!
Tenses were wrong. Question mark used for no apparent reason. Words that had no connection to the text of your sentence.
If you really are intent on progressing, then for Heaven's sake concentrate on your composition. My old English teacher would have made you correct this essay, and then, rewrite it several times.
I know that you are capable of doing excellent work. You have shown this in the past. If you wish to improve dramatically, concentrate on your work, not other things. This is YOUR FUTURE we are talking about,not mine.
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#3 (permalink) Thu Jan 07, 2010 11:38 am Compare and contrast the way of life that you and your parents live. |
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You are really a nice person Bill, I am glad that this forum has such nice guys like you. Really appreciate what you are doing for us.
Mixmixi _________________ Let's make a deal; I'll correct every single one of your grammatical mistakes AND YOU DO THE SAME FAVOUR FOR ME. |
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Mixmixi I'm here quite often ;-)

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#4 (permalink) Thu Jan 07, 2010 14:05 pm Compare and contrast the way of life that you and your parents live. |
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Thank you Mix for such a nice comment.
You know, sometimes I feel as though I am chasing a shadow that I have no hope of catching, and then along comes someone who changes, almost overnight, and shows tremendous promise.
This learning is a hard task-master. You are all on a learning curve, which seems never to turn upward, but when it does, .....boy, .....you are in for a wonderful ride.
Everything will become crystal clear to you, and then you can wave good-bye to Kitos. He will wish you a safe journey on your new course.
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