TOEFL® essay: Students can learn better by themselves or by teachers?

[Qwep44]

Hi!I'm a newcomer here to improve my English.Please help me to correct my essay.And I'm not sure how good it can be.Thanks a lot!
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When we are navigating at sea,we definitely need a compass.Rely on our feelings and experience,we might travel a limited distance,but we could not reach too far.Likewise,it is wise to learn with teachers when we navigate in the ocean of knowledge.They can show us the direction and the way to destination.Therefore,I believe that learning with a teacher is a better choice.

Learning with good teachers should bring faster and better results. Studying by themselves,students may have lots of questions which need answering. And the teacher can be the best guide to give answers to these questions. Although learning by oneself can provide freedom and independence, it takes time for one to find the learning methods all by oneself.A proper guidance from a teacher who has a high standard of knowledge might enable you to solve the promblem faster.Hence, teacher can help student to develop his skills and knowledge in a certain subject.

Not only would the teacher prepares you for the skills and knowledge on a specific subject,He or she would pass on all kinds of philosophies and views of the world as well.For instance,a wise teacher might teach students to cooperate with others,to respect others’s research fingdings and to bring tolerance and understanding to every culture and belief.Which a textbook or a manual may not contains.It is this wider view,this more inclusive approach that a good teacher can bring to the education of people.

However, I have to admit that some people can learn better by themselves than with a teacher, such as Einstein and some other extraordinary people. But it requires extreme talent and willpower to achieve the goals.As for the vast majority, it is generally wiser to follow a teacher.

To sum up,having a good teacher is always better than having none.It is too hard to study alone.A wise teacher can impart skills and knowledge as well as philosophies and views of the world to us.The combination of the extensive knowledge and the wider view that develops people the ability to succeed in the world academically and socially.

TOEFL listening lectures: Which fact is true of Edward O. Wilson?

[Kitosdad]

Hi!I'm a newcomer here to improve my English.Please help me to correct my essay.And I'm not sure how good it can be.Thanks a lot!
:)

When we are navigating at sea, we definitely need a compass.
SIMPLY BY RELYING on our feelings and experience, we might travel a limited distance, but we could not TRAVEL too far WITH CERTAINTY.
Likewise, it is wise to learn with teachers when we navigate in the ocean of knowledge.They can GIVE us the direction and SHOW the way to OUR TRUE destination.Therefore, I believe that learning with a teacher is a better choice.

Learning with good teachers should bring faster and better results. Studying by themselves, students may have lots of questions which need answering, and the teacher can be the best guide to give answers to these questions.
Although learning by oneself can provide freedom and independence, it takes time for one to find the CORRECT learning methods all by oneself.
A proper guidance from a teacher who has a high standard of knowledge, might enable you to solve the problem faster. Hence, A teacher can help A student to develop his skills and knowledge in a SPECIFIC subject.

Not only would the teacher prepare you for the skills and knowledge on a specific subject. He or she would pass on all kinds of philosophies and views of the world as well.
For instance, a wise teacher might teach students to cooperate with others, to respect others research findings and to bring tolerance and understanding to every culture and belief, which a textbook or a manual may not contain.It is this wider view, this more inclusive approach, that a good teacher can bring to the education of people.

However, I have to admit that some people can learn better by themselves than with a teacher, such as Einstein and some other extraordinary people. But it requires extreme talent and willpower to achieve the goals. As for the vast majority, it is generally wiser to follow a teacher.

To sum up, having a good teacher is always better than having none. It is too hard to study alone. A wise teacher can impart skills and knowledge, as well as philosophies and views of the world to us.
The combination of the extensive knowledge and the wider view that develops IN people the ability to succeed in the world, BOTH academically and socially.[
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A pretty good essay Qwep. Don't forget to leave a space between commas and the following letter, otherwise your work appears cramped. 8/10

Kitos.
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Qwep44]

Oh it's amazing! Thank you very much Kitos. I really appreciate this. And thanks for your advice.You make me more confident!

[Tomasito]

I think the title should be: "Can students learn better by themselves or by teachers?
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Education is a progressive discovery of our own ignorance.
- Will Durant

[Qwep44]

Yes,you're absolutely right.I ought to be more careful.Thank you!