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[Demon]

Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors. Other prefers to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

Depending on personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, we find that some people hold the idea of spending their free time outdoors meanwhile others prefer to spend it indoors. From my point of view, it is more advisable to choose to spend my free time outdoors rather than indoors. My arguments for this point are listed as below.

The main reason for my propensity for my choice is that I have more time to function in an open area. Being outdoors means a chance to stretch my mental and physical muscles. For instance, I can go jogging in a quiet park or play soccer with my friends to strengthen my body. After a hard day at school, these activities help me relax to prepare for one new day with a lot of new challenge waiting ahead.

Besides, participating in outdoors activities can help us to improve our real experience. As a famous saying goes: “You will learn more about a road by travelling it than by consulting all the maps in the world.” It is true when we go out, we have the chance to meet different people with different ideas about all aspects of life. Chatting and exchanging our ideas make us have a deeper vision about our true world.

It seems very difficult for us to prefer one to another because all of them have their advantages and disadvantages. To be frank, I would like to choose to spend time outsides because there are too many benefits that outnumber its advantages.
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[Kitosdad]

Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors. OtherS prefer to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

Depending on personal experience, personality, type and emotional concern, we find that some people hold the idea of spending their free time outdoors meanwhile others prefer to spend it indoors. From my point of view, it is more advisable to choose to spend my free time outdoors rather than indoors. My arguments for this point are listed as below.

The main reason for my propensity for my choice is that I have more /time/SPACE/ROOM/ to function in an open area. Being outdoors means a chance to stretch my mental and physical muscles. For instance, I can go jogging in a quiet park or play soccer with my friends to strengthen my body. After a hard day at school, these activities help me TO relax AND to prepare for /one/THE/ new day AHEAD with a lot of new challenge waiting.

Besides, participating in outdoors activities can help us to improve our real experienceS. As a famous saying goes: “You will learn more about a road by travelling it, than by consulting all the maps in the world.” It is true THAT when we go out, we have the chance to meet different people with different ideas about all aspects of life. Chatting and exchanging our ideas /make us have/LEAD US TO HAVING/ a deeper vision about our true world.

It seems very difficult for us to prefer one to another because all of them have their advantages and disadvantages. To be frank, I would like to choose to spend time outsides because there are too many benefits that outnumber its DISadvantages.

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Short, sweet, and quite good, but it failed to offer many comparisons. Don't be tempted to write without having some very valid ideas for your composition.

Kitos.
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