Questions about writing essays.

[Vietanhpham_Winter]

I've been wondering whether native English people use complex sentences, various structures when writing essays. If there's a topic: Imagine your country is going to host the World Cup. Talk about the preparations for this, then how long should I make it? Thank you for the consultations.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of Anthropology
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[Kitosdad]

If your intention is to take the TOEFL exam, then the requirements are; 300/350 words to be written within 30 minutes.

The choice of topic will not be yours to make.

If you wish to write complex sentences, that will hinge on your ability to do so.
By doing so your score will be higher.

If you use long words out of context, your marking will suffer because of this glaring mistake.
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Alan]

Hi VW,

I think the time has come for you to take the plunge and write a piece of prose so that it can be evaluated.

Alan
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English as a Second Language
You can read my ESL story Present Simple

[Vietanhpham_Winter]

Thank you both so much. Plunge and prose are 2 words with various meanings but I hope they're used with good meanings here. I'll try to send you something the next time. Once more, thank you for your enthusiasm about helping me.
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[Vietanhpham_Winter]

My short essay is about the preparations for the Asian Games. Please help me to point out any mistake you find regarding grammar and expression.
The asian games are coming soon. To prepare for them, we have a lot of things to do. First of all, we will have to build one more National Stadium, some sports buildings and car parks. Asian games are great competitions which appeal not only a large number of athletes but also visitors who love sports, so adequate facilities are essential. Besides, we need to upgrade our temporary National sports centers and local stadium as they may not be in good conditions. Being the host of a great event requires very careful preparations. The number of visitors is expected to be very large and thus housing is one of the problems. We must all make sure that there're enough rooms for everyone. In addition, we also need to equip special services for disabled athletes. The large number of people is bound to lead to traffic jams. Transportation in Vietnam has always been the greatest problem. Finding a way to solve this sounds impossible in such a short time but we must. We can widen roads to the stadium and sports centers, urge the people to follow traffic rules...etc.. Then, advertisements are also very important. Advertising work can be done through newspapers, TVs and radios. We also need volunteers who are good at English to help to instruct the visitors as most of them are foreigners. Last but not least, choosing an official song for the event cannot be omitted. It's simply because the song is what really shows up our spirits for sports. To do so, contests must be held and both singers and songwriters are responsible for contributing to the games. Hope it will make a success and bring glory to us.
Well, I'd be very grateful if you could point out the mistakes even referring to philology aspect like sentence building, structure even a dot or comma. And I also wish you to correct them. Thank you.
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[Alan]

Hi,

I have made some changes in CAPITAL letters:

My short essay is about the preparations for the Asian Games. Please help me to point out any mistakeS you find regarding grammar and expression.
The Asian Games are coming soon. To prepare for them, we have a lot of things to do. First of all, we will have to build one more National Stadium, some sports buildings and car parks. Asian Games are great competitions which appeal not only TO a large number of athletes but also visitors who love sport(s), so adequate facilities are essential. Besides, we need to upgrade our temporary National sports centers and local stadium as they may not be in A good condition(s). Being the host of a great event requires very careful preparations. The number of visitors is expected to be very large and thus housing is one of the problems. We must all make sure that there're enough rooms for everyone. In addition, we also need to equip special services for disabled athletes. The large number of people is bound to lead to traffic jams. Transportation in Vietnam has always been the greatest problem. Finding a way to solve this sounds impossible in such a short time but we must DO SO. We can widen roads to the stadium and sports centers, urge the people to follow traffic rules...etc.. Then, advertisements are also very important. Advertising work can be done through newspapers, TVs and radios. We also need volunteers who are good at English to help to instruct the visitors as most of them are foreigners. Last but not least, choosing an official song for the event cannot be omitted. It's simply because the song is what really shows up/OFF our spirits/ENTHUSIASM for sport(s). To do so, contests must be held and both singers and songwriters are responsible for contributing to the games.I hope it will make/BE a success and bring glory to us.
Well, I'd be very grateful if you could point out the mistakes even referring to philology aspect like sentence building, structure even a dot or comma. And I also wish you to correct them. Thank you.

This is a good piece of writing

Alan
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English as a Foreign Language
You can read my EFL story Progressive Forms

[Vietanhpham_Winter]

Thank you for your help. About the alternatives, I mean the capitals after my original words, are my words still acceptable or wrong? My teacher said it was too bad for me-the best student in her class. I just got 8 of 10 while other guys who just used a BOUQUET of simple sentences got the higher marks. She also always says I shouldn't use complex sentences. If that essay were in a TOEFL test, how many marks would it be? I'm now more and more fed up with living, studying and earning here in such a community. But going abroad will require much more in me.
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[Vietanhpham_Winter]

Also, why did you say a good piece of writing? Why just a piece and just writing? What I want is a complete essay. It seems to be a long way from my present position to the destination.
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Nothing's impossible! Never say never! They're what I've been following. Hope you to follow them too!