TOEFL® essay: Will the Internet bring people of the world closer together?

[Jimmy83]

Topic : Will the Internet bring people of the world closer together ?

In line with development of human society, there are many inventions to serve humanity becoming more effective and convenient, and the Internet is one of mankind's greatest invention in the last century. Due to the huge advantages of the Internet in term of exchanging information, it is considered as a way of building bridges among countries from around the world in today's integrated and interdependent world economy which orient to bring people of the world closer together.

First of all, to business, the Internet have given business people a much more a chance to manage relationships with their customers and clients more effective and quickly. In fact, conference online and chat services are implemented on the Internet have led to increase in opportunities for person-to-person communication anytime and anywhere. Most these things are quite cheaper than the cost of traveling long distances to meet and talk directly. Simply, workers just stay at home in front of computer screen and then remote access communication via the Internet. That is reason why a global company may have partners and customers from Europe, America or even in Africa.

To community, the Internet help people to contact with each other throughout the world easier and convenient, and the importance thing is very cheap, nearly free for everyone. This can be seen by the fact that we can easily and promptly approach people in different regions and cultures from within our own country in particular to other foreign countries.

All in all, the Internet has really changed the world and our lives in particular. It make communication between peoples easier and faster, and then the world nowadays is getting smaller and smaller.

I would appreciate someone can help me to value how bad and good it is

Thanks

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[Kitosdad]

TOEFL Topic : Will the Internet bring people of the world closer together ?

In line with development of human society, there are many inventions to serve humanity becoming more effective and convenient, and the Internet is one of mankind's greatest inventionS in the last century. Due to the huge advantages of the Internet in term of exchanging information, it is considered as a way of building bridges among countries from around the world in today's integrated and interdependent world economy which orient to bring people of the world closer together.

First of all, to business, the Internet have given business people much more OF a chance to manage relationships with their customers and clients more effectiveLY and quickly. In fact, conferenceS on-line and chat services implemented on the Internet have led to increase in opportunities for person-to-person communication any-time and anywhere. Most these things are quite cheaper than the cost of traveling long distances to meet and talk directly. Simply, workers just stay at home in front of computer screen and then remoteLY access communicationS via the Internet. That is reason why a global company may have partners and customers from Europe, America or even in Africa.

To community, the Internet helpS people to contact with each other throughout the world easier and convenientLY, and the importanT thing is THAT IT IS very cheap, nearly free for everyone. This can be seen by the fact that we can easily and promptly approach people in different regions and cultures from within our own country, in particular to other foreign countries.

All in all, the Internet has really changed the world and our lives in particular. It makeS communication between peoples easier and faster, and then the world nowadays is getting smaller and smaller.
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Not bad Jimmy, although there are a few things you might have mentioned, like sport, news, films, documentaries, and the part these play, via the internet in bringing nations together. Still, not bad.

Kitos. 8/10
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[Jimmy83]

how can I thank to you :)

Thanks so much Kitos, it's very helpful.

[Kitosdad]

Just keep posting Jimmy. Feel free to send money, chocolates, flowers, I don't mind. LOL.
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Jimmy83]

haha You r right LOL