please help me to express myself better for my internship application :(

[ALince]

Hello,

This is my cover letter for an internship program. Please help me to correct the existing faults :(

Dear……………………………………,

Is it with great interest and enthusiasm that I am applying for the XYZ`s (management) internship program.
My education background include both a fundamental economic and management knowledge. This help me build a self-confidence that I can suit your requirements and satisfy your conditions for the position. Moreover, the varied branches of science presented by Bulgarian and French lecturers would be of benefit to discharge my duties accurately.
During my work experience I have gained a sense of responsibility and I can consider myself as an active and organized person. My willingness to work hard and to acquire new competencies is going to facilitate the achievement of high results. The perception of everything new as a challenge but not as a threat would contribute to find solutions and solving problems. Simultaneously, the developed ability to adapt to a new work environment would make easier my team integration, efficient team work and cooperation.
Currently in my final year at the Faculty of economics and business administration, University of Sofia I am ready to build my future as a young professional.
I consider that your internship program is singularly important for my professional career and I believe that you are able to give me the opportunity to prove myself as an assiduous, motivated and ambitious young person.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best regards,

[Blue_Snow]

Come on! I think you can correct your writing yourself. Here are some tips: tenses, subject verb agreement(persons), passive or active. Those are what most of your mistakes relate to. In addition, you should look up for some words you aren't quite sure so that you could get the correct structures of them.

[ALince]

Hey!

Ok I`ll try! I promise :) Thanks for your help
I think that the first part doesn`t sound good :)

[ALince]

How does it sound now? Better i hope :):):)

Dear……………………………………,

Is it with great interest and enthusiasm that I am applying for the XYZ`s (management) internship program.
My educational background is based both on a fundamental economic and management knowledge. The theoritical basics make me think that i would be a suitabe candidate for the position.Moreover, the varied courses in the field of economics presented by Bulgarian and French lecturers would be of benefit to accomplish the assigned daiy tasks accurately.
During my work experience I have gained a sense of responsibility and I can consider myself as an active and organized person. My willingness to work hard and to acquire new competencies would facilitate the achievement of high results. The perception of everything new as a challenge but not as a threat would contribute finding solutions and solving problems. Simultaneously, the developed ability to adapt to a new work environment would make easier my team integration, efficient team work and cooperation.
Currently in my final year at the Faculty of economics and business administration, University of Sofia I am ready to build my future as a young professional.
I consider that your internship program is singularly important for my professional career and I believe that you are able to give me the opportunity to prove myself as an assiduous, motivated and ambitious young person.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best regards,

[Beeesneees]

I didn't see the final post above before posting this suggested text. I was working on the corrections when you posted the 2nd draft. Pay no attention to Blue_Snow's unhelpfulness. He's made many similar unhelpful comments all over the forum.

It is with great interest and enthusiasm that I am applying for the XYZ`s (management) internship program.
I am currently in my final year at the Faculty of Economics and Business Administration, at the University of Sofia and I am ready to build my future as a young professional.
My educational background includes a fundamental economic knowledge in addition to an understanding of management issues. With this knowledge, I have been able to develop a self-confidence that makes me feel I am well suited to the requirements of the internship program and I can satisfy the conditions required to successfully fill the position. Moreover, I feel that my knowledge of the varied branches of science presented by Bulgarian and French lecturers would be of benefit to me in being able to discharge my duties accurately.
During my work experience I have gained a sense of responsibility and I consider myself to be an active and organized person. My willingness to work hard and to acquire new competencies will facilitate the achievement of high results. I have a tendency to perceive new situations and issues as challenging, but not threatening, and feel that this outlook would contribute to my ability to find solutions and solve problems. I have developed an ability to adapt to new work environments, so feel that I could easily integrate into any team, working with cooperation and efficiency.
I consider that your internship program is singularly important for my professional career and I believe that you would be able to give me the opportunity to prove myself as an assiduous, motivated and ambitious young person.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best regards,[/quote]
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Cheers m' dears!

[ALince]

Beeesneees,

thank you a lot! It sounds much better than my second post....even my efforts :/ i must work harder on my english :)

[Beeesneees]

[ALince]

Thank you once again :)