Failure is proof that the desire wasn't strong enough.

[Shohruh]

Failure is proof that the desire wasn't strong enough. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

People face obstacles and difficulties throughout the periods which they can be alble to overcome, or sometimes concede their failure. Undesirable results should be believed by not having tendency or existing of other factors , this essay will check arguments
It is true that to achieve goals person should identify targets with being abundant of strong desire. Such owning firm willing to something may be following way to success. For example, sport athletes tend to show their best performances in competetions, which they have been aiming for long period. For this, desire should include practicing and hard working. It is often seen that those not fulfilling such requirements of succeeding come across with failure.
However, while hard-working and persistent people are doing their best, they may not be ensured of achieving their missions. The argument is that although, people have strong tendency to targets, no matter, the methods are not considered carefully, they may fail. For instance, a student may get lower band on their study if they have been taught by irrelevant theories and for this case failure is not cause of lacking of desire.
Additionally, although it is often believed there should be influence of luck to succeed or fail, it is unlikely that aimer has worked through true conception to blame situation for being unsuitable.
This essay can be concluded through investigating arguments that unless methods of practice and ways of dealing with them are not proper, not hard working and unwillingness may not be considered only result of failure.

Please , check my essay, I would be glad to see any critism and corrections.

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[Kitosdad]

Failure is proof that the desire wasn't strong enough. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

People face obstacles and difficulties throughout /the periods/THEIR LIVES/ which they /can be/FEEL UNABLE/ to overcome, or sometimes THEY SIMPLY concede their failure. Undesirable results should be believed by not having tendency or existing of other factors , this essay will check arguments

It is true that to achieve goals person PEOPLE should identify targets with AS being abundant of strong desire. Such owning firm willing to something may be following way to success.
For example, sport athletes tend to show their best performances in competItions, which they have been aiming for FOR A long period. For this, desire should include practicing and hard working. It is often seen that those not fulfilling such requirements of succeeding come across with failure.
However, while hard-working and persistent people are doing their best, they may not be ensured ASSURED of achieving their missions. The argument is that although people have strong tendency toWARD targets, no matter, IF the methods are HAVE not BEEN considered carefully, they may fail. For instance, MANY studentS may get A lower band IN THEIR studIES if they have been taught by irrelevant theories and for this case failure is not THE cause of lacking IN desire.
Additionally, although it is often believed there should be influence AN ELEMENT of luck REQUIRED to succeed or fail, it is unlikely that aimer THE WORKER has worked through true conception to blame THE situation for HIS being unsuitable.
This essay can be concluded through investigating arguments that unless methods of practice and ways of dealing with them are not proper, not hard working and unwillingness may not be considered only result of failure.
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Good morning Shohruh. Your work is poor. I would blame your desire to memorise words in the hopes of improving your vocabulary. You may have learnt the words, but you don't recognise the context in which they should be used. This has resulted in your inability to write a legible sentence. This essay was confusing, to say the least. You ought to spend more time reading, not memorising words. You should read more English publications, and note how the words that you have memorised are used.

Kitos. 7/10
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