Topic 36: Transportation vehicles have changed our lives

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Topic 36: Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s live.
- automobiles
- bicycles
- airplanes
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Since the day the Wright Brother invented the first airplane in the world, our lives have changed so much. With the help of this vehicle, we could travel faster, save a lot of time and deliver more goods in the time limited.

The airplanes make people travel much more than ever. Many people find it more convenient to travel by airplane because they can travel faster. If you are a tourist, you can visit many places around the world in just a short of time. This is very convenient, especially when you just have 2 days off. Moreover, during the flight, you can enjoy the meals and watch the scenery below at the same time. Therefore, there are more and more people want to travel abroad, which contributes much to the development of tourism.

Additionally, the airplanes also help the delivery more convenient. In fact, not every goods can be delivered by railway or cars because the time allowed is limited and the roads are too bad to go through. Thus, airplanes have helped people to transport these things to their destination on time. Thanks to that, every kinds of goods are distributed all over the world.

Finally, the advantages of the airplane help to make the rescue more quickly and effectively. Whenever there is a shipwreck, we can send some airplanes to help the people on this ship. This also help to send food to the places which have undergone a disaster or starvation faster; thus, people will not have to wait long and many of them can be saved. Therefore, our lives seem to be safer and happier.

To conclude, I think that the airplanes have a lot of influence on many aspects of our lives: tourism, deliveries and rescue, all of which have made our lives better.

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Please check for my essay please. Thank you.

Topic 36: Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s live.
- automobiles
- bicycles
- airplanes
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Since the day the Wright Brother invented the first airoplane in the world, our lives have changed so much. With the help of this vehicle, we could travel faster, save a lot of time and deliver more goods in the limited time.

The airOplanes make people travel much more than ever. Many people find it more convenient to travel by airOplane because they can travel faster. If you are a tourist, you can visit many places around the world in just a short SPACE of time. This is very convenient, especially when you have ONLY TWO 2 days off. Moreover, during the flight, you can enjoy the meals and watch the scenery below at the same time. Therefore, there are more and more people want to travel abroad, which contributes much to the development of tourism.

Additionally, the airOplanes also help TO MAKE deliverIES more convenient. In fact, not MANY goods can be delivered by railway or cars because the time allowed is limited and the roads are too badLY CONGESTED to GET through. Thus, airOplanes have helped people to transport these things to their destination on time. Thanks to that, ALL kinds of goods are distributed all over the world.

Finally, the advantages of the airOplane help to make the rescueS more quickly and effectively. Whenever there is a shipwreck, we can send some airOplanes to help the people on this ship. This also helpS IN SENDING to send food to the places which have undergone a disaster or starvation MORE QUICKLY; thus, people will not have to wait long and many of them can be saved. Therefore, our lives seem to be safer and happier.

To conclude, I think that the airOplanes have a lot of influence on many aspects of our lives: tourism, deliveries and rescue, all of which have made our lives better.
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