Do you prefer to live in a permanent warm place or a place with 4 seasons?

[Mohammad64]

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Absolutely, I prefer to live in a place with four seasons. In such a place, we can enjoy the beauty, which God has created for us, more. Furthermore, we can learn lots of things by viewing at the nature in each season.
In my opinion, it s enjoyable to look at the beauty of each season. Each season has its own features and beauties. It is amazing to look at snowfall in the winter. When everything is covered with white snow, it arouses a pleasant feeling inside me. Furthermore, it is a wonderful activity to throw snowball at each other and make a snowman. In the summer, you can enjoy the hot weather. We can go to the beach and get a tan. In the fall, it is really stunning to see the falling of leaves. Moreover, in the spring, it is a marvelous experience to hear the smell of flowers and to look at blossoms of trees.
In addition, there are some lessons in the change of seasons. The most important thing is that you see how dead nature in the winter, is transformed into an alive nature. In my view, it is a demonstration of doomsday when dead people become alive.
To sum it up, I believe that living in a place with four seasons is better than living in a permanent warm place because you can enjoy your life more and there are some indications in the change of seasons that are good to notice.

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[Kitosdad]

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Absolutely, I DEFINITELY prefer to live in a place with four seasons. In such a place, we can enjoy ALL OF the beauty which God has created for us more. Furthermore, we can learn lots of things by viewing at the nature in each season.

In my opinion, it IS enjoyable to /look at/BEHOLD/ the beauty of each season. Each season has its own features and beauties. It is amazing to look at snowfall in the winter. When everything is covered with white snow, it arouses a pleasant feeling /inside/WITHIN/ me.
Furthermore, it is a wonderfulLY ENJOYABLE activity to throw snowballS at each other and make a snowman.
In the summer, you can enjoy the hot weather. We can go to the beach and get a tan.
In the fall, it is really stunning to see the falling of leaves TUMBLING FROM THE TREES.
Moreover, in the spring, it is a marvelLous experience to SMELL the SCENT of flowers and to look at blossoms ON THE trees.

In addition, there are some lessons TO BE LEARNED in the changING of seasons. The most important thing is that you see how dead nature(,) SEEMINGLY DEAD in the winter, is transformed into an alive nature IN THE EARLY SPRING.
In my OPINION, it is a demonstration of /doomsday/THE RESURRECTION/(,) when dead people become alive ONCE AGAIN.

To sum it up, I believe that living in a place with four seasons is FAR better than living in a permanentLY warm place(,) because you can enjoy your life more(,) and there are some indications in the change of seasons that are good to notice.
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This was a good essay Mohammad. Please review it closely, and tell me if you agree that a slight change in the text improves it out of all recognition.
The essay had all of the ingredients of a good story.
It needed only to be embellished.
Keep up the good work Mohammad, you are developing very well.

Kitos. 8/10
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[Mohammad64]

Hi Mr. Kitos,

I strongly agree with you. I should have elaborated on my opinions.
I closely examined all my mistakes and I corrected all of them on my blog. In addition I made my mistakes bold.

http://mdaghaghzadeh.blogspot.com/2010/06/do-you-prefer-to-live-in-permanent-warm.html

Thank you very much
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