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[Jacksoon]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement

Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life

use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion


Which is happiest moment in a person's life

A person's life starts after entering the university and becoming mature enough to marry. Many people seems to agree that childhood is and isn't the happiest time of a person's life. In my opinion, I think that childhood isn't the happiest time of a person's life, for the following reasons.

First, when a person is still young (baby) he wouldn't remember his childhood when he grows up wether if it was nice or not. Therefore, because the person can't remember his childhood well enough he can't compare it to his new life, and to reach to conclusion. Second, there are some things that a mature person could do and have fun in while a child couldn't do; for example, marrying, drinking alcohols, and forming a family. Furthermore, an adult is able to become responsible for himslef and is able to obtain most of the things that he wants by working in a business or someone's house to receive some money. However, a child unlike an adult is not able to buy all the things that he wants without his parents permission. Last but not the least, there are many starving families around the world that are not able to satisfy all their needs and wants. Thus, a person may live a harsh and a difficuilt life which sometimes might not be worth remembering later on.

In conclusion, everyone one in this world have a unique life that is different from the others. Therefore, childhood is not always a sophisticated time in a person's life. As a result, a person must live his new life and not always remember his old life becuase it is not going to return to him.

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[Kitosdad]

A person's life starts after entering the university and becoming mature enough to marry. Many people seems to agree that childhood is OR isn't the happiest time of a person's life. In my opinion, I think that childhood isn't the happiest time of a person's life, for the following reasons.

First, when a person is still A young baby he wouldn't remember his childhood when he grows up wether if it was nice or not. Therefore, because the person can't remember his childhood well enough he can't compare it to his new life IN ENOUGH DETAIL to reach A conclusion.

Second, there are some things that a mature person could do and have fun DOING while a child couldn't do; for example, marrying, drinking alcohol, and forming a family. Furthermore, an adult is able to become responsible for HIMSELF and is able to obtain most of the things that he wants by working in a business or someone's house to receive some money. However, a child unlike an adult is not able to buy all the things that he wants without his parents permission.

Last but not the least, there are many starving families around the world that are not able to satisfy all their needs and wants. Thus, a person may live a harsh and a difficult life which sometimes might not be worth remembering later on.

In conclusion, everyone one in this world have a unique life that is different from the others. Therefore, childhood is not always a sophisticated time in a person's life. As a result, a person must live his new life, and not always remember his old life BECAUSE it is not going to return to him.
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Good morning Jacksoon. Your essay was a bit of an eye-opener, but I take your point. You must get out of the habit of using contractions in your work.

Kitos. 8/10
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