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[Can06]

Hi again, could you please feed back to my second essay?

Thanks.
Q - ) Some items (such as clothes or furniture) can be made by hand or by machine. Which do you prefer — items made by hand or items made by machine? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your choice.

Nowadays, the technology affects the humankind in effective way. A variety of sectors benefit from the advantages of the technology. These sectors have produced cheaper items so fast by using the cutting edge technology. On the other hand, this fast-production triggers a big problem. It is useless productions. In addition, if you use handmade products such as clothes or furniture, they will be unique and special unlike mass-produced ones.

The most important reason why I prefer handmade items is that they are unique, and anyone can't find the handmade items you have. So it means they are special to you. For instance, I have a handmade carpet, it is gifted by my best friend, Ali, at my birthday party. I know it is special and every time when I’ve looked at this carpet I’ve remembered my birthday and my best friend, Ali. It helps me to avoid my problems in a stressful day. On the other hand, they are very expensive because of handwork, despite of the uniqueness. They, at least, are two times more expensive than mass-produced items, however I think they worth this price.
The most important reason why I don’t prefer items made by machine is that they are useless and they are not sturdy. I have really bad exprience with this situation. In last winter, I went to a shop to buy a jacket, and I bought one of the jackets in the shop. Two days later, really ridiculous event happened to me. In the classroom I rised my hand up and then my jacket was ripped. Everyone in the classroom laughed at me. I don’t want to have such a bad experience anymore.
All things considered, in spite of the fact that handmade products are very expensive, I prefer handwork items because of their sturdiness and usefulness.

TOEFL listening lectures: What aspect of Carl Sandburg's life does the professor mainly discuss?

[Kitosdad]

Hi again, could you please feed back to my second essay?

Thanks.
Q - ) Some items (such as clothes or furniture) can be made by hand or by machine. Which do you prefer — items made by hand or items made by machine? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your choice.

Nowadays, the technology affects the humankind in AN effective way. A variety of sectors benefit from the advantages of the technology. These sectors have produced cheaper items so fast by using the cutting edge technology. On the other hand, this fast-production triggers a big problem. It is useless productions. In addition, if you use handmade products such as clothes or furniture, they will be unique and special unlike mass-produced ones.

The most important reason why I prefer handmade items is that they are unique, and anyone NO ONE can find the handmade items you have(,) so it means they are special to you. For instance, I have a handmade carpet(.) it WAS gifted TO ME by my best friend Ali at my birthday party. I know it is special and every time when I’ve looked at this carpet I’ve remembered my birthday and my best friend Ali. It helps me to avoid my problems in a stressful day. On the other hand, they are very expensive because of THE handwork(.) despite of the uniqueness. They COST at least are two times more expensive than TWICE THE PRICE OF mass-produced items(.) However I think they ARE WELL worth this price.
The most important reason why I don’t prefer items made by machine is that they are useless and they are not sturdy UNRELIABLE.
I HAD A really bad expErience with this situation. Last winter, I went to a shop to buy a jacket, and I bought one of the jackets in the shop. Two days later, A really ridiculous event happened to me. In the classroom I rAised my hand and then my jacket was ripped. Everyone in the classroom laughed at me. I don’t want to have such a bad experience anymore EVER AGAIN.
All things considered, in spite of the fact that handmade products are very expensive, I prefer handwork items because of their sturdiness and usefulness.
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More reading is the order of the day for you Can. You need a more flexible vocabulary.

Kitos. 7.5/10
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[Can06]

Okey Mr Kito. I'll take your advices. Thank you very much.