Some people think if the students are afraid of their teacher this is better, oth

[Prince303]

Some people think if the students are afraid of their teacher this is better, other think that having a friendly relationship with teachers in better, what do you think ?

School is a the place for overall development of students. In school they not only learn academics but general knowledge as well. After their parents, teachers are the ones who shape their lives through teaching them in school. Therefore a teacher plays a pivotal role in the life of students. Some people argue that students who are afraid of their teacher do better in school while others are of the idea that they must maintain a warm relationship with their teachers. I strongly support the view of later ones, that a student should be friendly with his teacher. My opinion is based on several reasons.
Firstly, having a friendly relation with teacher gives confidence to students to ask any question or doubts about any subject without being scared. Many students find it hard to raise their queries in front of a strict teacher. Because they are afraid that teacher might scold them or give them harsh punishment. Hence, interacting freely with teacher helps them to grasp the knowledge quickly and boosts their performance in the exams.
Secondly, students would maintain a hundred percent attendance class record if they are open with that teacher. Many students miss the classes of teachers whom they are afraid of. Consequently, this hampers their performance severely. For instance, recent survey from a big private school shows that students received low grades in few subjects simply because they did not attend the classes due to the fear of the teacher. Thus, friendly relationship with teacher makes them come to school and increases their interest in that particular subject.
Overall, friendly relationship with a teacher is essential for every student. It not only helps students to achieve better results but, also maintains the interest and enthusiasm in school life.

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[TutorPhil]

Not bad, Prince 303.
My only suggestion would be to get rid of all the fluff in the thesis statement. Keep it clean. Get to the point. Watch:

School is a the place for overall development of students. In school they not only learn academics but general knowledge as well. After their parents, teachers are the ones who shape their lives through teaching them in school. Therefore a teacher plays a pivotal role in the life of students. Some people argue that students who are afraid of their teacher do better in school while others are of the idea that they must maintain a warm relationship with their teachers. I strongly support the view of later ones, that a student should be friendly with his teacher. My opinion is based on several reasons.

Becomes:

Since teachers play a very important role in nurturing young people, they should strive to have friendly relationships with their students instead of relationships based on fear. First, being friendly facilitates learning by encouraging students to be more active. Second, it improves attendance and, consequently, performance as well.

You see, being short and to the point is always better. It makes you look confident. When you spend too much space before getting to the point, it makes you look like you're not sure about your views, so you don't want to present them clearly and quickly.

Hope this helps,

Phil
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[Prince303]

Thanks a lot teacher Phil.. i got that