GRE® essay: People attend college or university for many different reasons...

[Madhu_2010]

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Before going to college/university, one have to finish higher school studies successively. Decision would be taken to choose what to do next after high school studies. Some students go to college to pursue higher studies, while others start searching jobs at an early age.
There are the reasons why most of the people choose university/college instead of earning.

Firstly, students have their chances of gaining more knowledge while studying. In addition to this, there are many advantages. Improving propreity code of conduct, the way of talking with the professors and to name a few. Propreity is the most important thing in one's life. Because, anyone who wanted to join in a company, there should be propreity. Without these, nobody would hire a suitable candidate. Talking with professors is the next important thing. They would teach us some valuable thoughts and how to improve our studies, how to talk with the some intelligent people.

Secondly, most of students pursue more studies like doing Masters, Doctrate to name a few. These are to widen their knowledge, developing skills. Finally they would be flooded with the offers from a companies. Having education in college/university is the most valuable thing in one's life. Because, they would get many informations to decide in the future. They would be able to share their knowledge with their friends and much more. They would help us one we are in nervous, worring things and would convert them into a peaceful manner by giving some suggestions. Professors would help us if we have any doubts.

All in all, students must choose university/college to pursue education those who want to improve/ interested to have higher studies.

[Kitosdad]

Firstly, students have their chances of gaining more knowledge while studying. In addition to this, there are many advantages. Improving proprIEty code of conduct, the way of talking with the professors and to name a few. ProprIEty is the most important thing in one's life(,) because anyone who wanted to join in a company, there should be proprIEty. Without these, nobody would hire a suitable candidate. Talking with professors is the next important thing. They would teach us some valuable thoughts ON how to improve our studies AND how to talk with the some intelligent people.

Secondly, most of THE students pursue more studies like doing Masters, DoctOrate to name a few. These are to widen their knowledge AND TO develop skills. Finally they would be flooded with the offers from companies. Having education in college/university is the most valuable thing in one's life(,) because they would get LOTS OF information to decide in the future. They would be able to share their knowledge with their friends and much more. They would help us WHAN we are nervous AND worrYing ABOUT things and would convert them into a peaceful manner by giving some suggestions. Professors would help us if we have any doubts.

All in all, students must choose university/college to pursue education ALONGSIDE THOSE those who want to improve THEMSELVES OR ARE interested to have higher studies.
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I don't think that this work is up to GRE standards Madhu. You really need to do lots of reading to improve your ideas and flexibility in using your vocabulary.

Kitos. 6.5/10
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