GRE® argument essay: Grade inflation at Omega University

[Paul.CA]

i'm a beginner, and my first language is not English. I wanna know that how locals write their AW and how my AW level is. Thanks. Can anyone give me some suggestion?

The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.
"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors.

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In this argument, the author concludes that it is the evaluation procedure rather than any other factors should be responsible for the situation that Omega grades are not good at getting jobs. Admittedly, this argument seems reasonable superficially. However, critical flaws with the argument is that these evidence upon which it relies on is too unreliable to be thoroughly well-reasoned.

A threshold problem with the argument is that the author fails to provide evidence that all or most students in Omega participate the evaluation procedure. It is likely that there is few students participate this procedure. If this is the case, terminating the evaluation procedure will not have any effect on their success in getting jobs after graduation.

Seconly, the auther unfairly assumes that the increase of grade-average is the result of evaluation procedure. Ostensibly, it is entirely possible. But lacking evidence to support this crucial assumption, it is more likely that the increase can be influence by the combination of a host of factors. Consider the fact that students are more concerned about their grade-average or there are much more quality instruction and facilities in Omega than before and even that many students are cheating in the examination withou the professors know. Without taking into account these and other possible explanations, the author cannot make any credible assertion about the effective of terminating the evaluation proceudure, let alone about any influence of helping their graduates to secure jobs.

Thirdly, another flaw that undermine the logic of this argument is that the the author assumes that the Omega’s grades have not been as successful at getting jobs as Alpha’s is the result of their inflated grade-average is not accept by the market. Nevertheless, no evidence is provide by the author can justify this assumption. The author fails to take into account other possible alternatives, such alternative may include some contingencies such as supply and demand or changes in market. it is entirely possible that the market in this fifteen years is highly insufficient for industry grades which the Alpha is good at and Omega is not. It is equally possible that Alpha is a outstanding university in the worldwide and it’s grades are subsequently outstanding. If it is the case, terminating the procedure alone is far from being enough to make sure that the Omega’s graduates can be as successful in securing jobs as Alpha’s. Since the author fails to account for these and other alternative explanation, it is impossible to assess the feasibility of the recommondation.

Finally , even assuming that the foregoing assumption is justified, the argument relies on the this asuumption is stiil lacking the solid ground. By the author also asuumes that terminating the evaluation procedure is the necessary to solve the problem about getting jobes or would even suffice, because the author provides no reliable evidence to affirm this assumption. It is most likely that after terminating the procedure, Omega’s graduates’ job-placement record does not increase. It is not far to seek example. With its poor career-counseling services or lack-enthusiastical graduates, even terminate the procedure, there is no effective in securing jobs. Overall, lacking a detailed analysis the author cannot convince us that terminating the evaluation procedure is the necessary to solve the problem about getting jobes or would even suffice

In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing because the evidence cited by the author does not effectively support to the author’s conclusion. Therefore, to bolster the argument, the author must provide more reasonable evidence and take every possible alternatives into account.

[Kitosdad]

i'm a beginner, and my first language is not English. I wanna know that how locals write their AW and how my AW level is. Thanks. Can anyone give me some suggestion?

The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.
"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors.

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In this argument, the author concludes that it is the evaluation procedure rather than any other factors should be THAT ARE responsible for the situation WHERE Omega grades are not good at getting jobs. Admittedly, this argument seems reasonable superficially. However, critical flaws with the argument is that these evidence(,) upon which it relies(,) on is too unreliable to be thoroughly well-reasoned.

A threshold problem with the argument is that the author fails to provide evidence that all or most students in Omega participateD IN the evaluation procedure. It is MORE likely that there is few students participateD IN this procedure. If this is the case, terminating the evaluation procedure will not have any effect on their success in getting jobs after graduation.

SeconDly, the authOr unfairly assumes that the increase of grade-average is the result of evaluation procedure. Ostensibly, it is entirely possible(,) but lacking evidence to support this crucial assumption, it is more likely that the increase COULD HAVE BEEN be influenceD by A combination of a host of OTHER factors. Consider the fact that students are more concerned about their grade-average, or there are much more quality instruction and facilities in Omega than before(,) and even that many students are cheating in the examination withouT the professors knowLEDGE. Without taking into account these and other possible explanations, the author cannot make any credible assertion about the effectiveNESS of terminating the evaluation procedure, let alone about any influence of helping their graduates to secure jobs.

Thirdly, another flaw that undermineS the logic of this argument is that the the author assumes that the Omega’s grades have not been as successful at getting jobs as Alpha’s(,) AND THE INEVITABLE CONSEQUENCE of their inflated grade-average is not acceptABLE TO the market. Nevertheless, no evidence is provideD by the author can TO justify this assumption. The author fails to take into account other possible alternatives, such alternativeS may include some contingencies, such as supply and demand or changes in market CONDITIONS. It is entirely possible that the market in this fifteen years is highly insufficient for industry grades which the Alpha is good at MEETING, and Omega is not. It is equally possible that Alpha is a outstanding university in the world and it’s grades are subsequently outstanding. If it is the case, terminating the procedure alone is far from being enough to make sure that the Omega’s graduates can be as successful in securing jobs as Alpha’s. Since the author fails to account for these and other alternative explanation, it is impossible to assess the feasibility of the recommendation.

Finally , even assuming that the foregoing assumption is justified, the argument RELYING on THIS asSumption is stiLl lacking IN solid ground. By t The author also asSumes that terminating the evaluation procedure is the necessary to solve the problem about getting jobs or would even suffice, because the author provides no reliable evidence to affirm this assumption. It is most likely that after terminating the procedure, Omega’s graduates’ job-placement record does not increase. It is not far to seek example. With its poor career-counselLing services or THE lack OF enthusiastic graduates, OR even terminatING the procedure, there is no effective in securing jobs. Overall, lacking a detailed analysis the author cannot convince us that terminating the evaluation procedure is the necessary SOLUTION to solvING the problem about getting JOBS or would THAT DOING SO WOULD even suffice(.)

In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing because the evidence cited by the author does not effectively support to the author’s conclusion. Therefore, to bolster the argument, the author must provide more reasonable evidence and take every possible alternative into account.

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Pretty weak Paul, and riddled with poor spelling. You really have to try harder to improve your grasp of English.

Kitos. 6.5/10
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[Paul.CA]

Thanks for your time. I will try harder