thanks in advance for correting My essy (vijay)

[Urs_Vijayv]

As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers and discuss at least one problem that may result.

On the one hand, living in the today modern world and developing technologies replacing the computer instead of people. The computer is playing a crucial role in the entire field to do the work more effectively and accurately. Example, in car manufacturing Company, all the assembly works are done automatically by Robotics through the computer programming. The robotics is equipped with computer for doing the work in very quickly, Precise and reliable manner. Not only in automobile, computer even help the people to do their work easily and online booking for travel Rather than standing in line to book.

On the other hand, replacement of computer in the industries causes many issues. Firstly, people lay off from company. This laid off creates an unemployment problem society.
Sometimes company offers only very low wages to their worker for less work instead of sending out of the company because; the computers are placed in intricacy area to do the job. This low wages might affect people standard life due to not even earning for their daily life. This unemployment leads the people to involve crime in the society to support their family members. In the worst case unemployment cause the people to think to end of their life.

To recapitulate, computer are useful for the people in the fastest world to do their work quickly.But, in some point of view replacement of computer cause many issues like, unemployment, involving in crime in the society to support their family. Nevertheless, I believe that computer cannot duplicate all traditional works such as to make pottery. It requires age-old skills.

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[Kitosdad]

As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers and discuss at least one problem that may result.

On the one hand, living in the todayS modern world and developing technologies replacing the computer instead of people(,) the computer is playing a crucial role in the entire field to do the work more effectively and accurately. Example, in car manufacturing companIES, all the assembly works are done automatically by Robotics through the computer programming. The ROBOT is equipped with A computer for doing the work in A very quick, precise and reliable manner. Not only in automobile, Computers even help the people to do their work easily(,) and online booking for travel can be done rather than standing in line to book.

On the other hand, replacement BY computerS in industries causes many issues. Firstly, people ARE LAID off BY THE company. This LAY off creates an unemployment problem IN LOCAL society.
Sometimes company offers only very low wages to their worker for less work instead of sending out of the company because; the computers are placed in intricacy area to do the job. This low wages might affect people standard life due to not even earning for their daily life. This unemployment leads the people to involve crime in the society to support their family members. In the worst case unemployment cause the people to think to end of their life.

To recapitulate, computer are useful for the people in the fastest world to do their work quickly.But, in some point of view replacement of computer cause many issues like, unemployment, involving in crime in the society to support their family. Nevertheless, I believe that computer cannot duplicate all traditional works such as to make pottery. It requires age-old skills.
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UV, I'm sorry but you keep on ghurning out the same low standard of work. You really have to STOP and spend more time reading the work of others. Your sentence structure is all wrong, plus you constantly change the subject in your paragraphs, thereby confusing your readers.
Please, do as I request and do a lot of reading. Study the way sentences are constructed.

Kitos.
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