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[Svyatoslavkn]

Some people are very organized, while other people are not so organized. Which type of person are you? Support your response with specific examples.
In the society there are both types of people who are accurate with time and people who are disorganised and they can waste a lot of time every day. From my point of view, I am very organized and responsible person. I think so, because when I studied at school I was a very good student, and I have a lot of friends which always want to work with me. At the same time, I don't have significant problems at work and my boss trusts me.
During my school years, I always obtained excellent marks and from my point of view, it was connected with my organisation of every day. I always could prepare my homework very easy and it didn't take me more than three or four hours per day. I achieved this result because I had notebook where I took notes about what I should do. When every student are well organised he usually can resolve all situations at school and this will help him to do the same at university.
In my opinion, when some person has numerous number of friends it shows that he is a very punctilious and organised person. I am very proud that I have a lot of close friends and they can trust me because I always remember about my permissions. If I hadn't been organised person, I would have forgotten about my permissions and as a result, I wouldn't have any friends.
I always can achieve my aim at work not only because I am educated but because I am an organised person. This usually provides me the opportunities to do all my duties on time. As a result, my boss believes in me and promises me excellent career prospects in the future.
Among people there are different characters and models of behaviour but I think that I am a very organised person. First of all I was very good student at school and with my accurate attitude to people I achieved the trust. Also, I always well organise my working day and it gives me possibility to hope for good career prospects.

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TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two university students (2)

[Kitosdad]

Some people are very organized, while other people are not so organized. Which type of person are you? Support your response with specific examples.

In the society there are both types of people who are accurate with time and people who are disorganised and they can waste a lot of time every day. From my point of view, I am A very organized and responsible person. I think so, because when I studied at school I was a very good student, and I have a lot of friends WHO always want to work with me. At the same time, I don't have significant problems at work and my boss trusts me.
During my school years, I always obtained excellent marks and from my point of view, it was connected with my organisation. of every day. I always could always prepare my homework very easILy and it didn't take me more than three or four hours per day. I achieved this result because I had notebook where I took notes about what I should do. When every A student IS well organised he usually can usually resolve all situations at school and this will help him to do the same at university.
In my opinion, when some person has numerous number of friends it shows that he is a very punctilious and organised person. I am very proud that I have a lot of close friends, and they can trust me because I always remember about my permissions. If I hadn't been an organised person, I would have forgotten about my permissions and as a result, I wouldn't have any friends.
I always can achieve my aim at work, not only because I am educated, but because I am an organised person. This usually provides me the opportunities to do all my duties on time. As a result, my boss believes in me and promises me excellent career prospects in the future.
Among people there are different characters and models of behaviour, but I think that I am a very organised person. First of all I was very good student at school and with my accurate attitude to people I achieved their trust. Also, I always well organise my working day and it gives me the possibility to hope for good career prospects.
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That was quite repetitive Svyatoslavkn. I'm sure you can do much better than this. Try jotting down your ideas before you start writing. Use you imagination.

Kitos. 7.5/10
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