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[Priyasathiya]

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The article is about the grading school system and it gave some information about the types of grade in graded schools, that the students follow based on their age. The professor explains that the graded school has many cons rather than pros.
First, the reading quotes that the graded schools allow the students to start their schooling, only when they reach the age 6. However, the professor says that the age limit of 6 to commence the school would not be the better idea. According to the professor, not all the students attain maturity physically and mentally at the same age. He mentions that there are students who become mature to begin their school, even at the age 4 or age 5. Ther are also students who were not mature, even at the age 6. Thus, the professor argues that the age limit to start the schooling would not be appropriate for all students.
Second, the article posits that some students who were not able to fulfill requirements of the particular grade would be in a condition to repeat the year. The professor refutes this point saying that the issue of promotion should be revised. He quotes that researches and studies found the students whoever repeat the year would feel burden and it only has negative impact on the students.
Finally, the professor opposes the idea of group evaluation in the graded schools. These evaluation are not based on individual students and only on the group. So, there are no chance to find the ability of individual student.
To conclude, the points made in the lecture contrast with the reading. Age limit to begin school, repetition of year and group evaluation demontrates that the graded school system is in doubt.

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[Kitosdad]

Hi Kitos,
could you please evaluate my essay.
Thanks in advance.

The article is about the grading school GRADING system and it gave some information about the types of gradeS in graded schools that the students follow based on their age. The professor explains that the graded school has many cons rather than pros.

First, the reading quotes that the graded schools allow the students to start their schooling, only AFTER when they reach the age 6. However, the professor says that the age limit of 6 to commence the school would not be the better idea. According to the professor, not all the students attain maturity physically and mentally at the same age. He mentions that there are students who become mature to begin their school, even at the age OF 4 or age 5. TherE are also students who were not mature, even at the age OF 6. Thus, the professor argues that the age limit to start the schooling would not be appropriate for all students.
Second, the article posits that some students who were not able to fulfil requirements of the particular grade would be in a condition to repeat the year. The professor refutes this point saying that the issue of promotion should be revised. He quotes that researches and studies found the students whoever repeat the year would feel burdenED and it only has negative impact on the students.
Finally, the professor opposes the idea of group evaluation in the graded schools. These evaluationS are not based on individual students BUT only on the group. So, there IS no chance to find the ability of individual student.
To conclude, the points made in the lecture contrast with the reading. Age limit to begin school, repetition of year and group evaluation demonStrates that the graded school system is in doubt.
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Not bad Priyasathiya.

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