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[Uniken]

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"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."

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The arguer's conclusion that the newsmagazine company should decrease its emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers seems to be appealing to us at the first glance, after all, it is true, as the arguer pointed out, that the poorest-selling magazine issues were those that featured international news stories on their front covers.

However, that argument is totally based on the assumption that most of the readers maybe don't like the international news, which is unwarranted, after reading the whole content of the argument without noticing any evidence showing the readers' interest, to convince me that his statement is reliable.

To extend my opinion, even if the premise is substantiated that people don't like International news, which is, of course, unreliable, it doesn’t follow that they should decrease their effort on international news, because neither of the two evidences the arguer cited is convincing.

Firstly, the speaker, without considering the similarity between his magazine company and other competing magazine companies in company scale, the age of the readers, the price of the magazine and the management of the company and other factors that maybe affect readers' interest of buying it, just simply takes their measures as a useful and effective way to deal with the problem faced by his own magazine company, undoubtedly there's some difference in those aspects that makes the action unreliable to promise its success.

Secondly, according to the speaker, the cost of the magazine is increasing due to the emphasis on international news. It is common sense that the purpose of magazine company publishing magazine is to gain more profits; obviously the speaker misunderstood the meaning of 'profit', because he fails to take other factors that may affect their profits into account. There's even no comparison between the income and their cost, and he ignored the potential profits coming from advertisements and other possible ways that may counteract the cost and benefit more.

In terms of the Conclusion finally, the speaker makes a hasty one that they should decrease the emphasis on international news. However, the speaker fails to eliminate other possible ways to promote the magazine's spread. It is entirely possible that the price of it is too high for readers to purchase, or the design and arrangement of the magazine is not friendly enough to readers when comparing to other parts of the magazine. Probably improving either of them will make a sense. Without ruling out all of these possibilities and considering other feasible methods to deal with the problem, even if all the other evidences proves that the poor-selling is the result of the international news, the speaker still can't convince me that his conclusion is persuasive.

In sum, in order to consolidate his argument, the speaker should provide statistics about readers' interest, and also the actual reason for the poor-selling of the magazine.

[Kitosdad]

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"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."

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The arguer's conclusion that the newsmagazine company should decrease its emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers seems to be appealing to us at the first glance, after all, it is true, as the arguer pointed out, that the poorest-selling magazine issues were those that featured international news stories on their front covers.

However, that argument is totally based on the assumption that most of the readers maybe don't like the international news, which is unwarranted, after reading the whole content of the argument without noticing any evidence showing the readers' interest, to convince me that his statement is reliable.

To extend my opinion, even if the premise is substantiated that people don't like International news, which is, of course, unreliable, it doesn’t follow that they should decrease their effort on international news, because neither of the two evidences the arguer cited is convincing.

Firstly, the speaker, without considering the similarity between his magazine company and other competing magazine companies in company scale, the age of the readers, the price of the magazine and the management of the company and other factors that maybe affect readers' interest of buying it, just simply takes their measures as a useful and effective way to deal with the problem faced by his own magazine company(.) Undoubtedly there's some difference in those aspects that makes the action unreliable to promise its success.

Secondly, according to the speaker, the cost of the magazine is increasing due to the emphasis on international news. It is common sense that the purpose of A magazine company publishing magazine is to gain more profits; obviously the speaker misunderstood the meaning of 'profit', because he fails to take other factors that may affect their profits into account. There's even no comparison between the income and their cost, and he ignored the potential profits coming from advertisements and other possible ways that may counteract the cost and benefit more.

In terms of the Conclusion finally, the speaker makes a hasty one that they should decrease the emphasis on international news. However, the speaker fails to eliminate other possible ways to promote the magazine's spread. It is entirely possible that the price of it is too high for readers to purchase, or the design and arrangement of the magazine is not friendly enough to readers when comparing to other parts of the magazine. Probably improving either of them will make a DIFFERENCE. Without ruling out all of these possibilities and considering other feasible methods to deal with the problem, even if all the other evidences proves that the poor-selling is the result of the international news, the speaker still can't convince me that his conclusion is persuasive.

In sum, in order to consolidate his argument, the speaker should provide statistics about readers' interest, and also the actual reason for the poor-selling of the magazine.
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Kitos. 9/10
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[Uniken]

Thanks a lot Kitos , I just wonder whether the expression and the structure of the essay are native or not cu'z I'm not a native English speaker :)

[Uniken]

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[Kitosdad]

Yes, they are more than acceptable.
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