Time bound argument...please evaluate and give comments

[Shubham281985]

The following is a letter to the editor of the Glenville Gazette, a local newspaper.

"Over the past few years, the number of people who have purchased advance tickets for the Glenville Summer Concert series has declined, indicating lack of community support. Although the weather has been unpredictable in the past few years, this cannot be the reason for the decline in advance ticket purchases, because many people attended the concerts even in bad weather. Clearly, then, the reason for the decline is the choice of music, so the organizers of the concert should feature more modern music in the future and should be sure to include music composed by Richerts, whose recordings Glenville residents purchase more often than any other contemporary recordings. This strategy will undoubtedly increase advance ticket purchases and will increase attendance at the concerts."


The author of this letter to the editor of Glenville Gazette recommends that in order to increase sales of advanced tickets booking of Glenville's concert, the form of music should be changed to modern music and musics composed of Richerts should be included in the concert. He points out that decline in advanced ticket booking can't be due to bad weather because many people had attended concert in bad weather. According to author the choice of music by the organisors is attributed to decrease in numbers of advanced ticket booking. However, close scrutiny of his claims reveals several flaws which renders it unconvincing.

Author claims that bad weather is not attributed to decline in ticket booking is not well supported. Perhaps people had booked their ticket in times when weather was good and to the use the invested amount on ticket, people attended concert, but that doesn't indicate that people will invest again and again in the same way. It might be possible that listeners will not attend the next year fearing that weather might turn bad.

The assumption that choice of music is only attributed to decrease in numbers of saleable tickets is not well supported. The mode of music played in concert might be one of the reasons for decrease in numbers but there might be others inevitable reasons for that decrease. Perhaps another concert got establised in past years or the numbers of counters for tickets decreased drastically. These and many others factors weaken author's claims.

Even if it is assumed that the choice of music is the only factor for decline in numbers of tickets sales in past years, the assumption that music composed by Richerds will drastically increase sales of advanced ticket booking is wrong. Author points out people of Glanville like music composed by Richerts than other contemproray musicians, but it is entirely possible that the people visiting concert are outsiders (not resident of Glanville) and don't like richerts's music. If that is the case, the change in choice of music will be futile for organisors of Glanville's concert.

In conclusion, author's recommendations are not well supported. To make it more convincing author should provide evidence that the choice of music played by the organisors is the only factor for decline in numbers of salable tickets. Author must also present some statistics showing that listeners will like to listen music composed by Richerts.

The number of words is 407. Is is sufficient for good score ?? Are we allowed to give suggestions to the author what to include (As I have done in conclusion part) ??

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[Shubham281985]

Thanks !!!