please rate my essay and give advise to improve (vijay)

[Urs_Vijayv]

Students at universities have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages between them. Where would you prepare to live? Give reason for your preference.

When students entering into university often facing a lot of problem. The first and fore most is to look for comfortable places to live, such that the places must be peaceful for their studies and also has good amenities. Even I also faced the same problem, when I entered into university. But, I choose to live in university dormitory for the reason given in following passage.

On the one hand, its better to live in university dormitory because, a student pays merely low rent for the dormitory. The dormitory also provides sumptuous foods to students rather than preparing themselves. If they stay in the dormitory their things will be very safe because, dormitory has sentinel to watch their things. The dormitory has someone like a warden to control and guide them. The students in dormitory have a lot of opportunity to learn different culture, and customs from their companions. In addition, when they are in dormitory, students won't be feel bore because, always someone will be there to hangover with them. Moreover, students in dormitory can easily share or clarify their subject doubt while preparing for the exam. The students in the dormitory need the permission from the warden to go out of university for their personal work.

On the others hands, some students prepare to live in apartments because, they likes to enjoy with full freedom rather than someone controlling them. Usually the apartment rent will be more and they have to prepare foods by themselves. They also have to pay separate charges like sentinel, water and maintenance of apartments. The students will feel alone in staying apartments and no one will be there to share their happy and sad moments in day a toady life. There won't be any chance for group studies on exam times. The students can go outside any time from the apartment rather than getting permission to leave from apartments.

To sum up from the above, one should choose to live in the university dormitory because of cheap rent and getting foods in the dormitory and more over having the security to watch their things.

TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture from an arts class (2)

[Kitosdad]

Students at universities have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages between them. Where would you prepare to live? Give reason for your preference.

When students entering into university often facing a lot of problem. The first and fore most is to look for comfortable places to live, such that the places must be peaceful for their studies and also has good amenities. Even I also faced the same problem, when I entered into university. But, I choose to live in university dormitory for the reason given in following passage.

On the one hand, its better to live in university dormitory because, a student pays merely low rent for the dormitory. The dormitory also provides sumptuous foods to students rather than preparing themselves. If they stay in the dormitory their things will be very safe because, dormitory has sentinel to watch their things. The dormitory has someone like a warden to control and guide them. The students in dormitory have a lot of opportunity to learn different culture, and customs from their companions. In addition, when they are in dormitory, students won't be feel bore because, always someone will be there to hangover with them. Moreover, students in dormitory can easily share or clarify their subject doubt while preparing for the exam. The students in the dormitory need the permission from the warden to go out of university for their personal work.

On the others hands, some students prepare to live in apartments because, they likes to enjoy with full freedom rather than someone controlling them. Usually the apartment rent will be more and they have to prepare foods by themselves. They also have to pay separate charges like sentinel, water and maintenance of apartments. The students will feel alone in staying apartments and no one will be there to share their happy and sad moments in day a toady life. There won't be any chance for group studies on exam times. The students can go outside any time from the apartment rather than getting permission to leave from apartments.

To sum up from the above, one should choose to live in the university dormitory because of cheap rent and getting foods in the dormitory and more over having the security to watch their things.
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Good morning Urs. You still need lots of practice, as your work at the moment is very simplistic. If you are not reading, as I suggested, it will take you a very long time to improve.

Kitos. 7/10
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Urs_Vijayv]

sure i do, you believe me. i am reading papers daily i feel i don't know where am lacking to improve or the way am reading is not proper can you suggest me the way how t read paper

[Urs_Vijayv]

i ll post my one more essay now could you evaluate that please

[Kitosdad]

Urs, you should pay particular attention to the sentence structure, and the vocabulary that is being used. If you fail to understand what is being said, then find articles whose topic your are already familiar with.
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.