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[Shubham281985]

"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society"

Every human being is a part of society and society is known by its people. From childhood to senility, everyone plays his/her roles in society in different manner, which determine the destiny of society. The stability and success of society completely depends upon human being, who are part of society. Today's children are the future generation and the destiny of society depends upon how they are fostered by their parents.

I completely agree that the future of society depends upon present children. As they grow older and take charge from their precedents, they are responsible for its stabilty and success in terms of culture, industries etc. When we declare that a particular society is a good place for living because of its environment, stability etc, this is because of the people residing in that society. A society which is famous for plundering, killing and violence etc is because of its residents only. The society of this culture will always be like this if children at present are not fed with good education and ideas by their parents.

It completely depends upon parents, how they raise their children for better society. The above example of society famous for plundering, violence etc will clearly assert the above statement. If parents force their children and teach them how to plunder and get involved in violence etc, the children will also be involved in process of theft and violence in the near future. In that case, the society will never get changed from its present condition. On the contrary, if the same parents send their children to school for better education and inculcate them with the feeling that theft and violence is illegal, the children would serve to make a better society.

In my opinion, there are two types of people: one who are concerned towards society's problems and concerns and others who shows apathy towards the problems of society. The first category of People understand their responsibilities towards their society and inculcate the same ideas and feelings in their children which serves better for growth/success of a society. On the contrary, people who show apathy towards the concerns of society due to their own benefit or some other reasons will feed their children the same ideas. the assertion that all of us don't know how to raise children to serve for better of society is unwarranted. If that would have been the case than no one would have been helping each other, kindness of one for others would not have been present and people would have been killing each other for their own gain, impending growth of society. But this is not the scenario of every society, which undermines the above statements that all of us are unaware of good way of nurturing our children.

In conclusion, it can be said that children are the future generation and as a part of society, they decide the stability and success of it. The destiny of society depends on how they are nurtured by their parents. Although some parents fed their children with ideas of narcissism, but that is not the case everywhere.

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