help:~~advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits

[Nocturnalj]

Our life are full of different advertisements.advertisement,to a certain degree ,indeed seduce people to eat unhealthy food by exaggerating the apperance and nutrition of the junk food,such as fast food,Pizza,potato chips.etc .but virtually ,advertisment is not the main reason cause of unheathy eating habits.the reasons are chiefly as follows.

The first leading reason for unhealthy eating habits is people’s low self-dicipline.when people find a snacks is yummy ,they always can not help themselves buying it.in addition,most people convincing by their fireinds or relatives even if they had already knew the advertisement is not reliable.for instance,children always like newfangled food so they may beg their parents to buy one.usually,parents want their children has equal rights to possess things so eventually they may buy newfangled food for them .in that case,bad eating habits are gradually formed..from this we can see,self-control also ocuppied the position.

Equally another significant aspect is the fast paced life and pressure.with the fast development of the society ,we get more pressure.according to a survey among white collars ,the statistic data shows that approximately 35 percent of white collars do not have breakfast before they going to work .they always find no time to eat it.what’s more ,it is very common for white collars stay up late at night ,and they will ususlly have midnight snack.they eat large segment of junk food .moreover, busy work may upset people’s circadian clock.take designers for example,most designers think the most active time is nighttime and they will working till morning.by this means,they will not have meal on time and bad eating habits occurred.

The last but not the least ,the other essential factor caused by the lack of proper public education.people in the mordern society seldom have the awareness of healthy diet.neither do they reading book nor do they take care of themselves.they spend their time only concerntrate on their achivement and company’s profit.however,only when they sufferfrom serious healthy problem will they regret and start to enrich their knowledge on eating habits. Lacking healthy awareness is another main reason that leads to an unhealthy eating habit.

Above all ,we may draw a conclusion that advertisement is not the the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

TOEFL listening discussions: Why did the professor ask to see the student?

[Kitosdad]

Our life IS FILLED WITH different advertisements.advertisement,to a certain degree ,indeed seduce people to eat unhealthy food by exaggerating the apperance and nutrition of the junk food,such as fast food,Pizza,potato chips.etc .but virtually ,advertisment is not the main reason cause of unheathy eating habits.the reasons are chiefly as follows.

The first leading reason for unhealthy eating habits is people’s low self-dicipline.when people find a snacks is yummy ,they always can not help themselves buying it.in addition,most people convincing by their fireinds or relatives even if they had already knew the advertisement is not reliable.for instance,children always like newfangled food so they may beg their parents to buy one.usually,parents want their children has equal rights to possess things so eventually they may buy newfangled food for them .in that case,bad eating habits are gradually formed..from this we can see,self-control also ocuppied the position.

Equally another significant aspect is the fast paced life and pressure.with the fast development of the society ,we get more pressure.according to a survey among white collars ,the statistic data shows that approximately 35 percent of white collars do not have breakfast before they going to work .they always find no time to eat it.what’s more ,it is very common for white collars stay up late at night ,and they will ususlly have midnight snack.they eat large segment of junk food .moreover, busy work may upset people’s circadian clock.take designers for example,most designers think the most active time is nighttime and they will working till morning.by this means,they will not have meal on time and bad eating habits occurred.

The last but not the least ,the other essential factor caused by the lack of proper public education.people in the mordern society seldom have the awareness of healthy diet.neither do they reading book nor do they take care of themselves.they spend their time only concerntrate on their achivement and company’s profit.however,only when they sufferfrom serious healthy problem will they regret and start to enrich their knowledge on eating habits. Lacking healthy awareness is another main reason that leads to an unhealthy eating habit.

Above all ,we may draw a conclusion that advertisement is not the the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.
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Good morning Nocturnalj. This work of yours is really poor. It has many obvious faults,
basic grammar, spelling and punctuation. This would never be acceptable to a TOEFL examiner. You really need to knuckle down and start some serious studying, for you are going nowhere fast by producing this quality of work.

Kitos. 6/10
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Nocturnalj]

MR KITOSDAD:
could you please help me correct it? thanks so much~you said a good essay makes people understand what you are saying,do my essay weird and complicated?I also read other people's essay here,they usually use simple sentence,should I use simple sentences to decrease my errors? I think I tried my best.

[Nocturnalj]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor in successful development of country.

When talking about how to successfully develop a country, people always have a heated discussion and provide a lot of various suggestions. Some oppose to the statement that improving schools is the most important factor in successful development of country, arguing that there are much more factors overwhelm education. Nevertheless, I agree with this statement, reasons are as following.

First of all, improving schools will definitely cultivate more and more qualified workers, which play a crucial role in economy development and the construction of a modern nation. History abounds with such examples. After the World War two, the fascist Germany had been totally destroyed, whose industry had been seriously weakened. In 1946, people scarcely found a selling car at the market because of the short supply. Nevertheless, nowadays Germany has become the biggest economical power in Europe Union, whose car manufacturing not only meets the demands of Germans themselves, but also supply for hundred of foreign countries, even the cars of my family members are all the German cars! As we all know, since 1945, the government of Germany focused on the domestic issues and paid lots of attentions on education, the government not only allocate a great deal money on building colleges and universities, but also improve the average salary of teachers in elementary school. Thus there are sufficient qualified workers support the urgent postwar construction, as along as well-educated children contribute to the development of advanced scientific technology. Hence, the German has revitalized after the depression and it achieves success.

Secondly, the improvement of schools does benefit anyone in the country. Since a high-quality education is not focused on students’ grade, but pay attention to promote students’ ability. Students can gradually explore about themselves, what are they interested? How can they make it? Their creativity and imagination are developed by this way, which will fulfill their inner world. To be specific, with a certificate, students have more chance to find a good job and realize the life style they are longing for. Then, how come all the citizen of a country are happy about themselves and their life? In my opinion, that kind of country is inevitably successful country.

In summary, the improvement of education is a matter of both economy progress and personal satisfaction, and both of them are contribute to successful development of a country. Therefore, government should put enough emphasis on education and take measures to improve the education all the time. Only in this way, not only the foreigners regard the country successful, but also the citizens feel proud of the success of their motherland.

[Kitosdad]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor in successful development of country.

When talking about how to successfully develop a country, people always have a heated discussion and provide a lot of various suggestions. Some oppose to the statement that improving schools is the most important factor in THE successful development of ANY country, arguing that there are MANY more factors overwhelm education. Nevertheless, I agree with this statement(.) MY reasons are as followS.

First of all, improving schools will definitely cultivate more and more qualified workers, which play a crucial role in economy development and the construction of a modern nation. History abounds with such examples. After the World War two, the fascist Germany had been totally destroyed(.) THEIR industry had been seriously weakened. In 1946, people scarcely found a selling car BEING SOLD at the market because of the shortAGE OF supply. Nevertheless, nowadays Germany has become the biggest economical power in THE EuropeAN Union, whose car manufacturing not only meets the demands of Germans themselves, but also supplIES for hundred of foreign countries, even the cars of my family members are all OF German MANUFACTURE! As we all know, since 1945, the government of Germany focused on the domestic issues and paid lots of attentions on education(,) the government THEY not only allocate a great deal OF money on building colleges and universities, but also improve the average salary of teachers in elementary school. Thus there are sufficient qualified workers TO support the urgent postwar construction, as along as well-educated children contribute to the development of advanced scientific technology. Hence, the GermanS haVE revitalized after the depression and it achieves success.

Secondly, the improvement of schools does benefitS EVERYone in the country. Since a high-quality education is not focused on students’ grade, but pay attention IS PAID to promote students’ ability. Students can gradually explore about themselves, what are they interested IN? How can they make it? Their creativity and imagination are developed IN this way, which will fulfil their inner world. To be specific, with a certificate, students have more chanceS to find a good job and realize the life style they are longing for. Then, how come all the citizen of a country are happy about themselves and their life? In my opinion, that kind of country is inevitably A successful country.

In summary, the improvement of education is a matter of both economIC progress and personal satisfaction, and both of them are contribute to THE successful development of a country. Therefore, government should put enough emphasis on education and take measures to improve the education all the time. Only in this way, not only WILL the foreigners regard the country successful, but also the citizens feel proud of the success of their motherland.
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Basically a good essay. You MUST NOT post two essays at the same time. Wait to see the result of the first essay before beginning to compose another.

Kitos. 7.5/10
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[Nocturnalj]

OK:) thx so much`~~