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[Firas]

173 It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

Sometimes, a person doesn't have money in a certain moment of his life. Then, he will beg a loan to his either friends or bank, but some people think that borrowing money from a friend can harm the relationship of two friends. In my opinion, it only occurs if this friendship isn't true, because a real friend doesn't matter to lend money to his mate.

First of all, frequently, borrowing money from a friend consolidate the friendship. If the relation between friends is reliable, when one gets money from his mate, he will consider this a great aid because he was needing the money. Therefore, the friendship will be stronger than before. For instance, one day, my neighbor begged me some money, I lent and now every time which I need help he aid me.

On the other hand, if you had a dishonest friend, lending money to him could damage the friendship, because this type of friend never returns back your money. Even though he was your friend, this relationship wasn't true and then you should avoid to give him a loan. For example, my mother, one time, lent money to her workmate and he never paid my mom, consequently, this damaged their relationship.

In summary, I believe that borrowing money from a friend don't harm the friendship, if this relationship is reliable. Because a real friend doesn't matter to help a friend when he needs aid.

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[translie]

I advise you not to use contracted forms in any essay.

[Firas]

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[Andreana]

Contracted forms are short forms of verbs:

I am (long form)
I'm (contraction)

You are (long form)
You're (contraction)

She is (long form)
She's (contraction)

She has (long form)
She's (contraction)

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