computers have made life easier and more convenient

[Zuheir Khlaif]

Good Morning Mr Kitosdad

Thank you for your efforts

Please check this essay.

Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, computers and its accessories have several applications in our daily life. Computers are used in different aspects in my country: schools, universities, ministries and in some factories and stores . Broadly, using computers and their applications have a positive impact on our daily practices and make our life more easier than past. More effective, decrease the risks in some dangerous industries, increase the productivity, and more efficiency of the products due to using them.
My reasons and examples listed below will strengthen my point of view .

In the first place, computers save time and efforts . In recent time , citizens can finish their government transactions within minute because of computerization of archive. By one click, you will get information concerning all aspects of your life : financial , social , diseases ,…ect. Besides, We can pay our bills : electricity , water and all our financial commitments online by using computer, either from home or from office without leaving our places. Now, you can reserve your ticket from your office. It's easy to get reports about the sales and assets in the stores without needing to hire more persons to inventory the contents .

Secondly, using computers decrease the risks in dangerous industries and make it easy . We can use the Robot , which is controlled by computer , instead of human in several dangerous industries. Robots used mainly in industry of Planes , Automobile , electronics and ships.

This using will make it more easier and faster without any dangerous impact on human. To get high quality in some industries , they use computer to improve
Thirdly , computers make communications easier . By using your e-mails you will manage to communicate with many friends worldwide. The companies and stores can deal with each other through e-mails. Businessmen can easily hold many commercial contracts among them.

In addition to previous , it can save money , many students today don’t attend schools or university . They study online by using their computers , so they can study from wherever and whenever they want . They get certificates without any obstacles or difficulty.

To put all in a nutshell , computers and its accessories , also its application make our life more easier , more effective and more productivity than previous.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a university student and an adviser in the university's work-study program

[Kitosdad]

Good Morning Mr Kitosdad

Thank you for your efforts

Please check this essay.

Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, computers and their accessories have several applications in our daily life. Computers are used in different aspects in my country: schools, universities, ministries and in some factories and stores . Broadly speaking, using computers and their applications all have a positive impact on our daily practices and make our lives easier than in the past. More importantly, they decrease the risks in some dangerous industries, increase the productivity, and efficiency of the products due to using them.
My reasons and examples listed below will strengthen my point of view .

In the first place, computers save time and effort. In recent times, citizens are able to finish their government transactions within minutes because of the computerization of government archives. With one click, you can access information concerning all aspects of your life : financial , social , diseases ,…ect. We can also pay our bills : electricity , water and all our financial commitments on-line by using a computer, either from home or from your office without leaving our seat. Now, you can reserve your theatre, cinema or travel tickets from your office. It's easy to get reports about the sales and assets in stores without needing to hire more people to inventory the contents .

Secondly, using computers decreases the risks in dangerous industries, and make the work much easier . We can use the Robot, which is controlled by computer, instead of humans in several dangerous industries. Robots are mostly used in industries building airoplanes, automobiles, electronics and ships.

This using of computers will make it easier and faster without any dangerous impact on humans. To get high quality in some industries , they use computers to improve (?)


Thirdly, computers make communications easier. By using your e-mails you will manage to communicate with many friends worldwide. The companies and stores can deal with each other through the using of e-mails. Businessmen can easily hold many commercial contracts among them.

In addition to previous, it can save money. Many students today don’t attend schools or university. They study on-line by using their computers, so they can study from wherever and whenever they want. They get certificates without any obstacles or difficulty.

To put all in a nutshell, a computer and its accessories and applications make our lives easier, more effective and more productive than previously.
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Your punctuation again is terrible. It also proves that you posted two essays without waiting for the first to be edited. Please don't do this again! Spend some time reviewing the edited versions of your work before submitting another. (With correct punctuation.)

Kitos. 7.5/10
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[Zuheir Khlaif]

I'm sorry to bother you

mine paragraph :-

Secondly, using computers decrease the risks in dangerous industries and make it easy . We can use the Robot , which is controlled by computer , instead of human in several dangerous industries. Robots used mainly in industry of Planes , Automobile , electronics and ships.

The corrections that must be make as follow:-

Secondly, using computers decrease the risks in dangerous industries and make it easy. We can use the Robot, which is controlled by computer, instead of human in several dangerous industries. Robots used mainly in industry of Planes, Automobile, electronics and ships.

On other words, I must put the punctuation near the last letter . Is this correct?

[Kitosdad]

That is absolutely correct Khlaif. It is important that you get this punctuation correct. It could affect your scores in a detrimental way if you get it wrong.
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.