The people in the past were more friendly than people today

[Phuongmy1986]

Good afternoon everybody !

Please kindly edit my essay, and tell me which part that I should focus on. Many thanks. Any comment would be highly appreciated. Please help me

Do you think that people in the past were friendlier than people are today? This has become a very interesting question because different people answer this differently, and they all find their own reasonable argument. In spite the fact that people now are busier and have less time for the others, I still think that they are not less friendly than were people in the past. Following reasons and examples will strengthen my point of view.

First of all, people now are ready to share their knowledge and material, not only to friends, but also to strangers. For example, there are so many forums where members upload books and share experiences: we have TOEFL forums, where people enclose free TOEFL lessons; we have IT forums, where people post the latest information about technology. Almost of members in the forum do not know each other, but they come to take and send necessary material to each other for free.

Second of all, people now are willing to help the others for non-profit. Let’s take this website as a typical example. Here, linguistic scholars found enthusiastic teachers who review their essays, tell them what they’ve done wrong and motivate them to study harder. Besides, nowadays, there are so many humanitarian who spend time and money to help disadvantage children and people who suffer difficulties in life such as homeless people or people in disaster area.

Last but not least, people now treat each other in a kinder manner. The way people behave in public transportation or in public area demonstrates my point of view. In the bus, younger people offer their seat to older people; man helps woman and children. In the hospital, people give special car slot and special help to disable people.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that people now are friendlier than, or at least as friendly as, people were in the past. It is true that people now have less face-to-face communication, but they still give the others a nice treatment in different ways: they share their asset; they help each other; and they treat the others as politely as possible. Using high technology and telecommunication means, they still deliver a beautiful message: the message of friendship.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a university professor and a student in the professor's office

[Kitosdad]

Good afternoon everybody !

Please kindly edit my essay, and tell me which part that I should focus on. Many thanks. Any comment would be highly appreciated. Please help me

Do you think that people in the past were friendlier than people are today? This has become a very interesting question because different people answer this differently, and they all find their own reasonable argument. In spite of the fact that people now are busier and have less time for others, I still think that they are not less friendly than people in the past were. The following reasons and examples will strengthen my point of view.

First of all, people nowadays are ready to share their knowledge and material, not only with friends, but also with strangers. For example, there are so many forums where members upload books and share experiences: we have TOEFL forums, where people enjoy free TOEFL lessons; we have IT forums, where people post the latest information about technology. Most members in the forum do not know each other, but they come to take and send necessary material to each other for free.

Second of all, people now are willing to help others for non-profit. Let’s take this website as a typical example. Here, linguistic scholars find enthusiastic teachers who review their essays, tell them what they’ve done wrong and motivate them to study harder. Besides, nowadays, there are so many humanitarians who spend time and money to help disadvantage children and people who suffer difficulties in life, such as homeless people or people in disaster areas.

Last but not least, people now treat each other in a kinder manner. The way people behave in public transportation or in public areas demonstrates my point of view. On the bus, younger people offer their seat to older people; men helps women and children. In the hospital, people give special care and lots of special help to disabled people.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that people now are friendlier than, or at least as friendly as, people were in the past. It is true that people now have less face-to-face communication, but they still give the others nice treatment in different ways: they share their assets; they help each other; and they treat the others as politely as possible. Using high technology and telecommunication means, they still deliver a beautiful message: the message of friendship.
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Nice work Phuongmy. Very little improvement required. Well done.

Kitos. 9/10
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