SUCCESS DERSERVES WORKING HARD

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When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with
success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

People generally have different opinions about same topics because of their type observations or their thinking styles on the topics. The obtaining success can be one of these topics. People can separate two groups about this. One group thinks that the real success can obtain by studying hard, paying attention to work more. The second group advocates that success comes with luck.
People generally have this kind of strict opinions with their friends and relatives or their own experiences or observations .For example; while we are watching football game of best football players, we can know that they practice a lot and work a lot to reach that level so working hard become as important point. On the other hand, for the same example, a bad football player can score a goal with chance too. He can just touch the ball, then the call hit the ball can slip from the goal keeper’s hands so when people watch this, they think that he is so luck and because of that successful.
In my opinion, being successful needs both but working hard is the most outstanding piece. Because, sometimes people can be lucky to get a success but it can’t be permanent. Success wants more than luck. People must spend their time, feel tired, and pay attention to reach it. People must really deserve it with will of work but that also can’t show us all hard working people will be successful. Maybe, at first time they will fail or at second and third too but one day they will get solution of their workings.
Consequently, to deserve success firstly working hard and spending time to get it are more considerable points. Luck can follow these. Even if luck becomes fist degree, it can’t be so regularly.

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